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A magazine for young people has asked its readers to write a report for the the editor on how to make the magazine appeal more to teenagers and young adults. You should mention some of the things that are popular with young people and suggest subjects that should be included in the magazine. Write your report.

A magazine for young people has asked its readers to write a report for the the editor on how to make the magazine appeal more to teenagers and young adults. You should mention some of the things that are popular with young people and suggest subjects that should be included in the magazine. Write your report. l7mDw
To: Mr John From: The Tai Subject: Recommendations for the better magazine Introduction This report aims to list the things are popular with the young and make some suggestions about the areas should be displayed in the magazine. Popular things First off, in the modern society, there are more things that young adults concern to read or watch. For instance, music is an area that they often pay their attention to. Besides, some teenagers are taking the fashion into account. They enjoy wearing the beautiful clothes and then taking photos, which are posted on social network. On the other hand, we can't mention the familiar kinds of entertainments such as games, sports or films and the viral information about famous people, stars, etc as well. Recommendations However, the editors should organise the above subjects in an appropriate way. On the cover page, for example, the information should be the hottest news in day. After that, on each page they can add one area with the upcoming events, trends or reviews related to that. Furthermore, you ought to combine the news with photos instead of writing too much, which makes the readers bored and not want to read. In conclusion, in my view, I have some suggestions for you to improve the magazine for young people. You can reference and make changes for better one.
To: Mr John

From: The Tai

Subject: Recommendations for the better magazine

Introduction

This report aims to list the things are popular with the young and
make
some
suggestions about the areas should
be displayed
in the magazine.

Popular things

First
off, in the modern society, there are more things that young adults concern to read or
watch
.
For instance
, music is an area that they
often
pay their attention to.
Besides
,
some
teenagers
are taking the fashion into account. They enjoy wearing the
beautiful
clothes and then taking photos, which
are posted
on social network.
On the other hand
, we can't mention the familiar kinds of entertainments such as games, sports or films and the viral information about
famous
people
, stars, etc
as well
.

Recommendations

However
, the editors should
organise
the above subjects
in an appropriate way
. On the cover page,
for example
, the information should be the hottest news in day. After that, on each page they can
add
one area with the upcoming
events
, trends or reviews related to that.
Furthermore
, you ought to combine the news with photos
instead
of writing too much, which
makes
the readers bored and not want to read.

In conclusion
, in my view, I have
some
suggestions for you to
improve
the magazine for young
people
. You can reference and
make
changes
for better one.
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IELTS letter A magazine for young people has asked its readers to write a report for the the editor on how to make the magazine appeal more to teenagers and young adults. You should mention some of the things that are popular with young people and suggest subjects that should be included in the magazine. Write your report.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
224 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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