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A letter to your friend for collage or getting a job

A letter to your friend for collage or getting a job dopY2

Dear John How have you been? It’s a long time we didn’t seen each other. When I got your a letter actually I surprised. But I’m so excited because I be able to help you. Therefore please listen to me very carefully. As you know it the collages are accept the student for in certain term. And if you want to enroll to collage you must prepare your all files before deadline. That’s mean You will have collected documents before in this end of the month. But in my opinion you won’t be happy in collage. The collage its not suitable for you. You don’t like doing homework or passing time in library. The getting a job instead of the collage it’s perfect for you. You are willing person to helping people or creating some thing different from other person. Also you know your this side. Have you a dream about the what you want or what is make happy to you. Just think about that. And also you can save money when you are working. Actually I have one suggestion for you. When we are young you played guitar. So you should improves your this ability. Maybe you can find job in cafes or bars near to your house. I support you for this affair. Just try it. You deserve to be happy and if you need any help please contact to with me. Warm Wishes.

Dear John

How have you been? It’s a long time we didn’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 each other. “When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
 I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 your a letter

actually I surprised. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 I’m This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 excited This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I Did you mean "am" or "will be"?amwill be
be
 able to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 you. Therefore
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphplease.please!please?please:please,please;
please


This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterListen
listen
 to me This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
carefully
. As you know it the collages are Consider using a past participle here: "accepted".accepted
accept
 the student for in certain term.

And if you want to enroll to collage you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 prepare your all files This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 deadline. That’s Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphmean.mean!mean?mean:mean,mean;
mean


You will have collected documents This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 in this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the month. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 in my opinion you won’t be happy in collage. The collage its not suitable for you. You don’t like doing homework or passing time in library.

The getting a job instead
 of the collage it’s perfect for you. You are willing person to helping This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 or creating Did you mean "something"?something
some thing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 from other person. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 you know your this side. Have you a dream about the what you want or what is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 happy to you. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
Just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 about that. And also
 you can save money when you are working.

Actually I have one suggestion for you. “When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
 we are young you played guitar. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 you should The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "improve"improve
improves
 your this ability. Maybe you can find job in 'cafes' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "cafés"cafés
cafes
 or bars near to your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
. I support you for this affair. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
Just
 try it. You deserve to be happy and if you need any This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 contact to with me.

Warm Wishes. 