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A letter to my mother telling her how i miss her and how she loved and supported me.

A letter to my mother telling her how i miss her and how she loved and supported me. RwKkV
Dear Mum, Its has been a long time since we were together. I miss your beautiful face, your welcoming smile, our special times together. I remember growing up in your warm embrace and feeling the comforts and security that only one would get when they are loved. I was on a bus the other day and saw a young mother nurturing and playing with her new-born child. It was wonderful how you looked at me. We always felt a warm blissful feeling when we were in each others side. The days you would walk me to school were blissful. You always made sure I had my bags packed with my school lunch. Your words of advice would still ring in my ears. Son always listen to your teacher. One day I came home crying after John Smith beat me up! You were like wild storm that day! It was certainly a ruckus that day at school! Mr Jones the principal certainly knew what had to be done about John after you spoke with him. Miss your eggplant dish with the minced beef and potatoes. Please make me large and loaded plate when I get home in a fortnight. Love you very much! Steven
Dear Mum, Its has been a long time since we were together. I miss your
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beautiful
face, your welcoming smile, our special times together. I remember growing up in your warm embrace and feeling the comforts and security that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one would
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get
when they are
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loved
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was on a bus the other day and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
a young mother nurturing and playing with her new-born child. It was wonderful how you looked at me. We always felt a warm blissful feeling when we were in each others side.

The days you would walk me to school were blissful. You always made sure I had my bags packed with my school lunch. Your words of advice would
still
ring in my ears. Son always listen to your teacher.

One day I came home crying after John Smith beat me up! You were like wild storm that day! It was
certainly
a ruckus that day at school! Mr Jones the principal
certainly
knew what had to
be done
about John after you spoke with him.

Miss your eggplant dish with the minced beef and potatoes.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me large and loaded plate when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
home in a fortnight.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Love
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much! Steven

IELTS letter A letter to my mother telling her how i miss her and how she loved and supported me.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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