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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some money

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some money jOwX

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to provide my feedback regarding your decision to sponsor a children’s sports team for two years or pay for two open-air concerts in my area. There are various advantages in sponsoring the sports team. Firstly, with the help of adequate training, children will get the opportunity to participate in sports at domestic or at international level. Secondly, sports will help children to remain fit and healthy. There are certain benefits of paying for the concert. It will bring local community together and they are more likely to enjoy with everyone. Furthermore, music is good for health because it not only assists in mitigating people stress but it also claim their mind. Both music and sports are essential for healthy lifestyle. Therefore, I suggest that you could spend partly sponsoring a sports team for 1year instead of two years and partly open-air concert instead of two. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully,

Dear Sir/Madam,

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sports
 team for two years or pay for two open-air concerts in my area.

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 team. Firstly
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help
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get
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 children to remain fit and healthy.

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people
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stress
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but
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claim
 their mind.

Both music and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 are essential for healthy lifestyle. Therefore
, I suggest that you could spend partly sponsoring a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 team for 1year instead
 of two years and partly open-air concert instead
 of two.

I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully
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