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You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organisers. In your letter: Explain why you are interest in helping Give details suitable past experience Suggest ways you might help with the event

You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organisers. In your letter: Explain why you are interest in helping Give details suitable past experience Suggest ways you might help with the event N1mW
Dear Sir/Madam, Hope you are doing well, I am writing this letter regarding your advert in “Hamshahri” newspaper on 16 of Feb to find a volunteer for your next month event. My name is Mehrshad Musakhani and I was born in Tehran in 1992. My mother was working in a charity association helping to orphans(helping orphans) whose(who) lost their parents. Given that I grow up (grew up)in the middle of charity events and I have an extensive network of people who are interested in help in both financial and spiritual fields. I remember that since I was 5 I was invited to similar events as a guest or host, so I have practical experience to run an event like yours, I was wondering if such an event is going to be held in my area, I would be the person to participate as a coordinator to arrange agenda, and also logistic tasks. Furthermore, Not only can I be beneficial in those fields but I am also able to invite my friends who are interested to help as I mentioned I know many groups of people who are running charity events like you. So I would be really grateful if you accept my request to join as a volunteer. Looking forward to hearing from you. Mehrshad Musakhani.
Dear Sir/Madam,

Hope you are doing well,

I am writing this letter regarding your advert in “
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Hamshahri
” newspaper on 16 of Feb to find a volunteer for your
next
month
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event
. My name is
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Mehrshad
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Musakhani and
I
was born
in Tehran in 1992. My mother was working in a charity association helping to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "orphan".
orphans
(helping orphans) whose(who) lost their parents.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Given
that I grow up (grew up)in the middle of charity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
and I have an extensive network of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
are interested
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in both financial and spiritual fields. I remember that since I was 5 I
was invited
to similar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
as a guest or host,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I have practical experience to run an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
like yours, I was wondering if such an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
is going to
be held
in my area, I would be the person to participate as a coordinator to arrange agenda, and
also
logistic tasks.
Furthermore
, Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
can I be beneficial in those fields
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I am
also
able to invite my friends who
are interested
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
as I mentioned I know
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
groups of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who are running charity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
like you.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I would be
really
grateful if you accept my request to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
as a volunteer.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

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Mehrshad
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Musakhani
.
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IELTS letter You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organisers. In your letter: Explain why you are interest in helping Give details suitable past experience Suggest ways you might help with the event

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
216 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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