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You have paid for a cricket course at a Sports Club, but due to a medical reason cannot complete the entire course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter, explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible

You have paid for a cricket course at a Sports Club, but due to a medical reason cannot complete the entire course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter, explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible 3jAJ
Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing this letter to express my sincere apology for discontinuing with the current cricket training session at your athletic club, because of my health condition. Since childhood I had a keen interest toward this sport. My dream is to enter the Indian cricket team someday. Therefore, in order to pursue my goal, I enrolled for this outstanding program at your prestigious academy. Unfortunately, i got a fracture on my knee due to an accident and doctor has suggested me to take complete rest for next 3 months. I wanted to check if there is a possibility for reimbursement of the amount paid or there is an option to keep the course on hold for some time. It would be really hepful, if you can help me with the refund or any alternative option to continue the sessions. Awaiting for your response. Yours Sincerly, Ginu Thomas
Dear Sir/Mam,

I am writing this letter to express my sincere apology for discontinuing with the
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current
cricket training session at your athletic club,
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because
of my health condition.

“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
The comma is probably missing here: "childhood, I".
childhood I
had a keen interest toward this sport. My dream is to enter the Indian cricket team someday.
Therefore
, in order to pursue my goal, I enrolled for this outstanding program at your prestigious academy.

Unfortunately,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
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got
a fracture on my knee due to an accident and doctor has suggested me to take complete rest for
next
3 months.

I wanted to
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check
if there is a possibility for reimbursement of the amount paid or there is an option to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the course on hold for
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some
time. It would be
really
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hepful
, if you can
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help
me with the refund or any alternative option to continue the sessions.

Did you mean "awaiting" or "waiting for"?
Awaiting for
your response.

Yours
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Sincerly
,

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Ginu
Thomas

IELTS letter You have paid for a cricket course at a Sports Club, but due to a medical reason cannot complete the entire course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter, explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible

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  American English
8 paragraphs
148 words
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