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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Pp6K
Dear John, I hope this letter finds you in good spirits. It has been a while since you had written to me about helping you in finding a job here in India. This whole time I was in contact with my professional acquintances looking for something which might be of your interest and I'm pleased to inform you that I have found a great opportunity. The vacancy is of the post Research Assistant in Banglore with a firm which is doing cutting edge work in the field of Artificial Intelligence. The company is called NewIntel and is relatively new although it holds a promising future. You may want to scroll through their website to know more about their projects. Though the role is slightly different from your field of study, I reckon you should go for it as AI is relatively new and work would be exciting and a good learning experience. Having said this, I would advise you to consult with Professor Newton at university as well and check what he thinks about this. Do let me know about your decision so that I can get an interview arrange for you at the earliest. Take care, Ankit
Dear John,

I hope this letter finds you in
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good
spirits. It has been a while since you had written to me about helping you in finding a job here in India. This whole time I was in contact with my professional
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acquintances
looking for something which might be of your interest and I'm
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
pleased
to inform you that I have found a great opportunity.

The vacancy is of the post Research Assistant in
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Banglore
with a firm which is
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "going cutting".
doing cutting
edge work in the field of Artificial Intelligence. The
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company
is called
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NewIntel
and is
relatively
new although it holds a promising future. You may want to scroll through their website to know more about their projects. Though the role is
slightly
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different
from your field of study, I reckon you should go for it as AI is
relatively
new and work would be exciting and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
learning experience. Having said this, I would advise you to consult with Professor Newton at university
as well
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
what he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thinks
about this.

Do
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let
me know about your decision
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so
that I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an interview arrange for you at the earliest.

Take care,

Ankit
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IELTS letter A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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