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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer VdMQ
Dear Sir, My name is Akshit Mehta residing in your college accommodation, I am writing this letter to inform you about my situation sharing a room with another student. I am in a conundrum with my current arrangement of living as my roommate makes it particularly hard for me to focus on my studies. Since the start of college my roommate has taken up a hobby into playing instruments which makes it very hard for me to focus on my work. The excessive noise and incessant need to play such instruments makes it quite difficult for me to live in such an atmosphere. I would like to request you to please change my current living condition as I would prefer to be placed in a room where I can focus on my studies without being disturbed by such an ambiance, if possible I would request you to please allocate me a room of my own. Thanking You, Akshit Mehta
Dear Sir,

My name is
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Akshit
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Mehta
residing in your college accommodation, I am writing this letter to inform you about my situation sharing a room with another student.

I am in a conundrum with my
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current
arrangement of living as my roommate
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makes
it
particularly
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hard
for me to focus on my studies.

Since the
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start
of college my roommate has taken up a hobby into playing instruments which
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makes
it
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very
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for me to focus on my work. The excessive noise and incessant need to play such instruments
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makes
it quite difficult for me to
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live
in such an atmosphere.

I would like to request you to
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please
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change
my
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living condition as I would prefer to
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in a room where I can focus on my studies without
being disturbed
by such an ambiance, if possible I would request you to
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please
allocate me a room of my
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Thanking You,

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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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158 words
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