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1. Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter a) Explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital. b) Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do c) Give details of when you would be available for this work.

1. Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter a) Explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital. b) Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do c) Give details of when you would be available for this work. 1YdA
Dear Sir/Madam, I am Steve Anne, pursuing Nursing course in St. Paul’s college of Nursing in California. I am writing in connection with the advertisement in ‘California Times’ newspaper about unpaid work in your hospital. I would like to apply for this work. Allow me to elaborate in details. I am going to complete my nursing course in five months and anticipating placement activities. I would like to gain some experience in the field of Nursing. I heard that, some eminent person working in your hospital. Therefore, I am quite confident that, working in your organisation will be like a breakthrough in my life. My last term examination will be about practical, dealing with real time patients and interacting with them. Therefore, it will be better, if you could provide me a job role of Nurse. Lastly, as my college timings are not flexible, I have to attend classes in daytime, hence, I often get time in evenings. I feel enthusiasm working in night shifts. I hope, you could consider this letter and do my needs. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Steve Anne
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am Steve Anne, pursuing Nursing course in St. Paul’s college of Nursing in California. I am writing in connection with the advertisement in ‘California Times’ newspaper about unpaid work in your hospital.
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I
would like to apply for this work.
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Allow
me to elaborate in
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details
.

I am going to complete my nursing course in five months and anticipating placement activities. I would like to gain
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some
experience in the field of Nursing.
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I
heard that,
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some
eminent person working in your hospital.
Therefore
, I am quite confident that, working in your
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organisation
will be like a breakthrough in my life.

My last term examination will be about practical, dealing with real time patients and interacting with them.
Therefore
, it will be better, if you could provide me a job role of Nurse.

Lastly
, as my college timings are not flexible, I
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have to
attend classes in daytime,
hence
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
time in evenings. I feel enthusiasm working in night shifts. I hope, you could consider this letter and do my needs.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Steve Anne
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IELTS letter 1. Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter a) Explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital. b) Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do c) Give details of when you would be available for this work.

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