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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in find a job in local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves, say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her, explain how to apply fir the job.

Dear Aisha I hope you are fine. I’m writing to you to let you know that one of a local company here in Canada is hiring for a Software Developer and you are fit for that position. The company name is Games Application Development. They are looking for a female with 5 years experience in developing the system, troubleshooting and programming. I had a friend in that company, she worked there for almost 7years and she said that the company is excellent due to the fact of giving a high salary, double pay for the holiday and have a benefit once the contract is finished. As I know you, you’ve had a great experience in that position and I'm sure you are suitable for that. I get the company email so you can apply via the internet online by sending your resume here rameshpoudeldeveloper@gmail. com and you contact him in WhatsApp 0581443182. Good luck and God bless. Your friend Judith
Dear Aisha

I hope you are fine.

I’m writing to you to
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here in Canada is hiring for a Software Developer and you
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name is Games Application Development. They are looking for a female with 5 years experience in developing the system, troubleshooting and programming. I had a friend in that
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, she worked there for almost
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she said that the
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is excellent due to the fact of giving a high salary, double pay for the holiday and have a benefit once the contract
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. As I know you, you’ve had a great experience in that
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position and
I'm sure you are suitable for that.

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luck and God bless.

Your friend

Judith

IELTS letter A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in find a job in local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves, say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her, explain how to apply fir the job.

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