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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He or she had asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • Describe some possible disadvantages • Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He or she had asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • Describe some possible disadvantages • Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer 0k59
Dear Samer, I hope that you are fine. I am writing this letter in reference to your interest to get my device for a camping holiday in the summer. As per our discussion that it will be your first-holiday camping with your college mate in the mountains very, so I can guarantee you that you are going to love the greenflies and beautiful sunrises over there. You always love to enjoy winter with a cup of coffee but you know in Karachi we never had a very cold season, so I am sure you would enjoy the cold weather, one more thing that as you are very foody, so will never forget their delectable foods. This holiday camping is going to become an adventural event for you. As you are going to in October, as a result, the weather would be very cold and there is the possibility to become sick with flu or cough so do not forget to take some warm clothes and medicines with you. You never went to such areas in the past, so you must be very careful when climbing up as routes can be rough and slippery and there are many chances to fall down. You must take good shoe wear specifically for the climbing purpose. As I told you that I went camping 2 years before, so I would like to join you. You can ask your organizer and let me know about the charges. In the meantime, I will discuss with my mum to take permission. I am anxiously waiting for your positive response. Your Riffat
Dear
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Samer
,

I hope that you are fine. I am writing this letter in reference to your interest to
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get
my device for a camping holiday in the summer.

As per our discussion that it will be your
first
-holiday camping with your college mate in the mountains
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very
,
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so
I can guarantee you that you are going to
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love
the greenflies and
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beautiful
sunrises over there. You always
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love
to enjoy winter with a cup of coffee
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but
you know in Karachi we never had a
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very
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cold
season,
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I am sure you would enjoy the
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cold
weather, one more thing that as you are
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very
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foody
,
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so
will never forget their delectable foods. This holiday camping is going to become an
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adventural
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event
for you.

As you are going to in October,
as a result
, the weather would be
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very
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cold
and there is the possibility to become sick with flu or cough
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so
do not forget to take
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some
warm clothes and medicines with you. You never went to such areas in the past,
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so
you
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must
be
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very
careful when climbing up as routes can be rough and slippery and there are
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many
chances to fall down. You
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must
take
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good
shoe wear
specifically
for the climbing purpose.

As I
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told
you that I went camping 2 years
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before
,
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so
I would like to
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join
you. You can ask your organizer and
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let
me know about the charges. In the meantime, I will discuss with my mum to take permission.

I am
anxiously
waiting for your
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positive
response.

Your
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Riffat
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IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He or she had asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • Describe some possible disadvantages • Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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