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A friend has told you that he or she feels lonely in their new city away from their family. Write to your friend, and Explain why people can feel this way Give some ideas on how to solve the problem Ask your friend to contact you and tell you if this works

A friend has told you that he or she feels lonely in their new city away from their family. Write to your friend, and Explain why people can feel this way Give some ideas on how to solve the problem Ask your friend to contact you and tell you if this works ob2oq
Dear Petra, I am so sorry to hear that you are feeling rather isolated in your new home, especially as you have always been such an outgoing person! I think that people tend to feel lonely because they don’t have enough opportunities to meet new friends. This leads to them staying at home more so that the situation becomes even worse. If I were you, I would join some of the clubs and societies which exist at your college, for example, the ballroom dancing club – because I know how much you love dancing. This means you will meet people with similar interests and abilities, and you can share the enjoyment of the ballroom. I would also try to use the Internet more, to meet people safely online and see if they are local to you in your new city. You have to be very careful, of course, but if you use Internet sites as they are intended I’m sure you will find some new friends - not necessarily of the romantic type! Please do keep in touch, and let me know how you get on with these suggestions. If you let me know how this goes, I can try to think of other ways to help you in your situation at the moment. Take care and do stay in touch. All the best, Anjelika
Dear Petra,

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that the situation becomes even worse.

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I know how much you
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dancing. This means you will
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people
with similar interests and abilities, and you can share the enjoyment of the ballroom. I would
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use
the Internet more, to
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on with these suggestions. If you
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me know how this goes, I can try to
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you in your situation at the moment.

Take care and do stay in touch.

All the best,

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Anjelika
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IELTS letter A friend has told you that he or she feels lonely in their new city away from their family. Write to your friend, and Explain why people can feel this way Give some ideas on how to solve the problem Ask your friend to contact you and tell you if this works

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