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Complain my parents rules

Complain my parents rules 6mwGG
Hello everyone, today i will talk about my parent's rules and i will complain about it, this is my first time talking about it. Because i am the youngest in my family, i never dare to complain about anything. But if i had a chance to talk to my parents, i will complain about parent's rules that make me and my sisters couldn't freely do what I was passionate about and gradually it made it difficult for me to communicate with people. First, my parents always setting a time for me to go home in the evening, they made me be at home at 8pm. so I don't have much time to spend with friends which makes me more and more timid, and less talkative. Second, if i hang out with my friends, they will always ask me about my friends, questions like: " Do they study well? "; " Do they drink alcohol? "; "Do they dye their hair? '. . . I don't know why they ask, because even though they don't study well, dye their hair, . . but they treat me very well and teach me many good things. I discussed this with my parents but they still don't want me to play with such friends. I don't like how my mom denies what I tell my parents about my health because they think I'm young. I've seen doctors advise on eye drops not to use. Even the kind that my parents are using knows that the ingredients in that eye drop bottle have ingredients that are harmful to the eyes, which can lead to blindness, so i advised my parents not to use them anymore. My mother just said, "Are you looking at fake newspapers again? ! " and ignore me. I really just wish they would listen to me more and allow me to be free with my friends
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will complain about parent's
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me and my sisters couldn't
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always setting a time for me to go home in the evening, they made me be at home at 8pm.
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me more and more timid, and less talkative. Second, if
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hang out with my
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, they will always ask me about my
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study well, dye their hair
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like how my mom denies what I
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about my health
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are using knows that the ingredients in that eye drop bottle have ingredients that are harmful to the eyes, which can lead to blindness,
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advised my
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not to
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Are you looking at fake newspapers again? !
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wish they would listen to me more and
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IELTS letter Complain my parents rules

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314 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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