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9- You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

9- You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. 3Npd
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request information on compensation seminar that is going to be held next month at London. I work as System Analyst in a multinational company at India. Our company has recently launched workday as the new human capital software. I am keen on learning the Workday compensation elements and basic concepts which would help me grow in career prospects. Also, I find this software extremely user-friendly and cloud base helps the people to access from anywhere. Would you please help me with topics that are covered in this program. It would be great, if you could help with the timeline and dates for the seminar so that I can choose the topics I would be interested. I request you to provide the entry requirements and fee structure for the seminar. Though London is new to me, I have plan of choosing to stay at my friend's house. please do let me know if accommodations can also be arranged for the foreigners? Looking forward for you reply, Yours faithfully, Nancy
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to request information on compensation seminar
that is
going to
be held
next
month at London. I work as System Analyst in a multinational
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
at India. Our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
has recently launched workday as the new human capital software.

I am keen on learning the Workday compensation elements and basic concepts which would
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
me grow in career prospects.
Also
, I find this software
extremely
user-friendly and cloud base
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to access from anywhere.

Would you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
me with topics that
are covered
in this program. It would be great, if you could
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
with the timeline and dates for the seminar
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can choose the topics I would
be interested
. I request you to provide the entry requirements and fee structure for the seminar. Though London is new to me, I have
Use past participle here: "planned".
plan
of choosing to stay at my friend's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
please
do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if accommodations can
also
be arranged
for the foreigners?

Looking forward for you reply,

Yours
faithfully
,

Nancy
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IELTS letter 9- You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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