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5. If you have a concentration or area of interest in mind, briefly outline your interests in this area. 7. Activities and Engagements- What do you expect to contribute as a student and subsequently as a member of the profession?

5. If you have a concentration or area of interest in mind, briefly outline your interests in this area. 7. Activities and Engagements- What do you expect to contribute as a student and subsequently as a member of the profession? RW8Mo
I come from a family that has earned its living through businesses and my exposure to the cogs of this machine came from my roots. I find myself to be very receptive to new information and it took me very little exposure to the business world to acquaint myself with the convolutions that surround this vertical. Owing to my relentless fascination with solving intriguing problems and managing creative ideas, it became clear as day that I had found my calling. My father picked up on my interest in his profession and started to take me along with him to different business events. At the workplace, I learnt discipline, work ethic and people management from my father. I was in awe of the kind of work he did, and I decided to push the envelope for myself by learning the ropes. As I grew older, I did blue-sky research and learnt that leadership and communication skills are integral for effective business management. I read books and articles that talked about effective business strategies, and although I didn’t understand much at the time, I was always an eager beaver to find out about the advancements in the business world. After discussing with my parents and teachers, I realized that I had a predilection for business studies and management. Hence, I decided to hone my skills and challenge my aptitude to get a head start in my career as a Business and Management Leader. To achieve my goals, I decided to pursue commerce and business studies in school. Initially, it was difficult for me to draw a bead on the subjects, however I learnt to work the problem instead of giving up, and that set the ball rolling. This made me aware of what would best be described by the term ‘business intelligence’, and how Finance and Accounting play an almost mission-critical role in the entire paradigm. With the solid foundation that I built through my curriculum in high school, I graduated with flying colors and was awarded for academic excellence. Soon, I realized that my school needed a club where students could engage in discussions, or experiment with the subject knowledge on business studies. Hence, I collaborated with a few interested students and drafted a proposal for the establishment of the Business Leadership Club in school. As part of the process, I presented my proposal in front of the school authorities outlining the deliverables of the group and communicated with the teachers about the potential learning curve that the club could offer to interested students. Two weeks later, the proposal was accepted by the school committee, and I was appointed as the core member of the Business Leadership Club. As part of the club, I researched and learnt about various strategies to excel in the field of business management. I requested my teachers to vet my research before arranging live workshops for interested candidates. As it turned out, they proved to be helpful in promoting learner engagement, hence I was trusted with additional responsibilities. I started to organize competitions that were based on business simulations that allowed the participants to use their critical-thinking skills and problem-solving skills to arrive at a solution. These activities generated a positive buzz amongst the students and helped me earn my spurs as a leader and innovator. Soon, I was appointed as the President of the club. After graduating from school, I secured an admission in one of the most renowned Indian colleges for Bachelors in Business Administration Sri Guru Gobind Singh College of Commerce, Delhi University. The course structure was highly interactive and motivated me to apply my knowledge in the form of projects, experiments, and case studies. Learning at a steady clip, I decided to test my wings and translate my learnings from the classroom into my father’s business. I set up some business and management goals for myself, and gauged my performance based on the parameters that I’d learnt about in college. Soon, I was able to draw results that inched towards profits rather than losses. I made a note of the creative strategies that I’d used to fulfil my goals and discussed them with my professors to arrive at a possible permutation that could have helped me achieve the solution faster. This technique helped me develop a growth mindset and pushed me to keep an even keel in high-stakes situations. The course was designed to meticulously follow the concepts of Accountancy, Economics, Financial Management, Auditing & Cost Accounting, all subjects that were individual pieces of this big puzzle that I was trying to solve, but at the same time, each a world of its own. My previous encounters with numbers taught me that theoretical knowledge would only take me so far and that it was imperative for me to put my knowledge to practice. With that thought in my mind, I set out to apply for internships across India whilst studying and managed to land one with Ashoo Model Art in the Finance department. I got the opportunity to apply my skills, which gave me priceless insight into real-world applications of the concepts of Accounting and Economics. In my role, I performed the core functions in addition to fulfilling a customer-facing role, which helped me understand relationship management, device management, and the role of technology in Finance to a certain degree, but most importantly, it gave me an opportunity to build myself up as a skilled individual. Within the 3 months of my internship with the company, I learned about new ways to approach problems and derive solutions out of the information presented. This brought a new slant to my perspective and successfully ushered me into a new beginning as I graduated with outstanding results and caught the eye of the technology giant, Deloitte, where I proceeded to work as an Audit Assistant in the Finance Department. With Deloitte, I got the opportunity to work with some of the most brilliant minds in the field who were nothing short of exemplary in their work. This helped me learn the nitty-gritty of the trade and enhance my knowledge of the subject multifold. With this priceless experience, I moved on to work with Multicolor Steels India Pvt. Ltd. in the capacity of a Financial Assistant. The progressive and diverse environment, both professionally and culturally, built by Claremont Graduate University will be the perfect source of global exposure for my learning and skills. Furthermore, I am confident that my diligence and zeal to tackle the unknown would be the perfect recipe to help me conjure a successful career within the talented student community, which would be nothing short of a dream come true. The United States of America is a land of endless opportunities. It is a hub of some top-rated academic institutions that offer internationally recognized qualifications, where one can nurture their true potential, gain confidence, and sharpen interpersonal traits. Its academic standards and quality of education are the highest in the world. Thereby, I am sure about my abilities and confidence that the robust education pattern of the USA Universities will allow me to gain the required endeavor in the industry-oriented ideologies and management sector to accelerate my career further. To fuel my dreams into reaching their fruition, I now intend to pursue a Masters’ degree in Finance and evolve my skillset into one that will allow me to make an impact globally. In the next five years, I aim to hone my abilities in the field by continuing to work with some of the best minds in the sphere and step into leadership roles through transformational leadership. After gaining immense knowledge and relevant practical exposure of the domain, I will fulfill my ultimate goal, which is to start my own venture on a global scale and build a global conglomerate, for which the subjects I am going to study in my master's program would help me to tackle the challenges of the business world with great intellect, and thus allow me to emerge as a leading figure of the industry. Besides, your prestigious University's panel of experts and professional faculty will enable me to acquire contemporary strategic management skills with a global perspective. A dynamically curated curriculum, including Qualitative method in Finance, Investment Management, and Applied Corporate Finance courses encourages me to enhance my skills under the influence of the intensive curriculum offered by your reputed university. Being a part of the excellent pedagogy of the top ranked business schools of the USA would serve as a gateway to tremendous opportunities as I will gain knowledge from the rich experiences of varied professionals from different industries. The progressive and diverse environment, both professionally and culturally, built by your prestigious University will be the perfect source of global exposure for my learning and skills. Furthermore, I am confident that my diligence and zeal to tackle the unknown would be the perfect recipe to help me conjure a successful career within the talented student community, which would be nothing short of a dream come true. My ideologies and ambition, combined with the vast platform set up by your institution, can bring out the best results in the global business and management sector. I know for sure; I will prove myself, exhibit my skills, abilities, and indeed add to your alumni ranks. I am anticipating a positiveresponse. Sincerely Siddhi Mangla
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machine
came from my roots. I find myself to be
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receptive to
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information and it took me
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very


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little
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exposure
to the
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to acquaint myself with the convolutions that surround this vertical.

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became
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to take me along with him to
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business
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. At the workplace, I
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learnt
discipline,
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work


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ethic
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people
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from my father. I was in awe of the kind of
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he did, and I
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decided
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to


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push
the envelope for myself by learning the ropes. As I grew older, I did blue-sky research and
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that


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leadership
and communication
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skills
are integral for effective
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business
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management
. I read books
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and


articles that talked about effective
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business
strategies, and although I didn’t understand much at the time,

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business
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. After
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discussing


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with
my parents and teachers, I realized that I had a predilection for
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business
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studies
and management.

Hence
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to hone my
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a head
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in my
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as a Business

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and
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Management
Leader.

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, I
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decided
to pursue commerce and
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in
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.
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for me to draw a bead on the subjects,
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the problem
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that
set the ball rolling. This made me aware of what would best be
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described
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business


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intelligence
’, and how
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Finance
and Accounting play an almost mission-critical
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role
in the entire paradigm.

With the solid foundation that I built through my curriculum in high
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, I graduated with flying colors

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and
was awarded
for academic excellence.
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, I realized that my
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needed a
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club
where students

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could
engage in discussions, or experiment with the subject
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knowledge
on
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business
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studies
.
Hence
, I

collaborated with a few interested
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students
and drafted a proposal for the establishment of the Business

Leadership
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Club
in
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school
. As part of the process, I presented my proposal in front of the
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authorities


outlining the deliverables of the group and communicated with the teachers about the potential learning

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curve
that the
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club
could offer to interested
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. Two weeks later, the proposal was
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accepted
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the


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school
committee, and I
was appointed
as the core member of the
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Leadership
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. As part
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of


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the
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club
, I researched and
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learnt
about various strategies to excel in the field of
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business
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management
. I

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requested
my teachers to vet my research
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before
arranging
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live
workshops for interested candidates. As

it turned out, they proved to be helpful in promoting learner engagement,
hence
I
was trusted
with

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additional
responsibilities. I
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started
to organize competitions that
were based
on
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business
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simulations


that
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allowed
the participants to
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use
their critical-thinking
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to arrive at a

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solution
. These activities generated a
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positive
buzz amongst the
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and
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helped
me earn my
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spurs


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as
a leader and innovator.
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Soon
, I
was appointed
as the President of the club.

After graduating from
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, I secured an admission in one of the most renowned Indian colleges for

Bachelors in
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Business
Administration Sri Guru
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Gobind
Singh College of Commerce, Delhi
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University
. The

course structure was
highly
interactive and motivated me to apply my
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knowledge
in the form of projects,

experiments, and case
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studies
. Learning at a steady clip, I
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to
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test
my wings and translate
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my


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learnings
from the classroom into my father’s
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business
. I set up
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and
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management
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for


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myself
, and gauged my performance based on the parameters that I’d
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learnt
about in college.
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, I was

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able
to draw results that inched towards profits
rather
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strategies


that I’d
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to fulfil my
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goals
and discussed them with my professors to arrive at a possible permutation

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that
could have
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mindset
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keep
an even keel in high-stakes situations. The course
was designed
to
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meticulously


follow the concepts of Accountancy, Economics, Financial
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Management
, Auditing & Cost Accounting, all

subjects that were individual pieces of this
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big
puzzle that I was trying to solve,
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at the same time, each

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a
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world
of its
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own
. My previous encounters with numbers taught me that theoretical
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knowledge
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would


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only
take me
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far and that it was imperative for me to put my
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knowledge
to practice. With that
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thought


in my mind, I set out to apply for internships across India whilst studying and managed to land one with

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Ashoo
Model Art in the
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Finance
department. I
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got
the
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opportunity
to apply my
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, which gave
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me


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priceless
insight into real-world applications of the concepts of Accounting and Economics. In my
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,
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I


performed the core functions
in addition
to fulfilling a customer-facing
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, which
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helped
me understand

relationship
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management
, device
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management
, and the
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role
of technology in
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to a certain degree,

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but
most
importantly
, it gave me an
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opportunity
to build myself up as a skilled individual. Within the 3

months of my internship with the
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company
, I learned about
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new
ways to approach problems and derive

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solutions
out of the information presented.

This brought a
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slant to my perspective and
successfully
ushered me into a
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beginning as I

graduated with outstanding results and caught the eye of the technology giant, Deloitte, where I

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proceeded
to
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work
as an Audit Assistant in the
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the
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opportunity


to
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with
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some
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work
. This
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helped
me learn the nitty-gritty of the trade and enhance my
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knowledge
of the
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subject


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multifold
. With this priceless experience, I
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moved
on to
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with Multicolor Steels India Pvt. Ltd. in the

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capacity
of a Financial Assistant. The progressive and diverse environment, both
professionally
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and


culturally
, built by Claremont Graduate
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University
will be the
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perfect
source of
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global
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exposure
for my

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learning
and
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.
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, I am confident that my diligence and zeal to tackle the unknown would

be the
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perfect
recipe to
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career
within the talented
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community, which

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would
be nothing short of a dream
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come
true.

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. It is a hub of
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top-rated
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academic


institutions that offer
internationally
recognized qualifications, where one can nurture their true

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potential
, gain confidence, and sharpen interpersonal traits. Its academic standards and quality
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of


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education
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are
the highest in the
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. Thereby, I am sure about my abilities and confidence that the

robust education pattern of the USA
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Universities
will
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allow
me to gain the required endeavor in the

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industry-oriented
ideologies and
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management
sector to accelerate my
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further
. To fuel my
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dreams


into reaching their fruition, I
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now
intend to pursue a Masters’ degree in
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Finance
and evolve my
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skillset


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into
one that will
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allow
me to
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make
an impact globally. In the
next
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in


the field by continuing to
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work
with
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some
of the best minds in the sphere and step into leadership roles

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through
transformational leadership. After gaining immense
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knowledge
and relevant practical
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exposure


of the domain, I will fulfill my ultimate
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goal
, which is to
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start
my
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own
venture on a
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scale and build

a
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conglomerate, for which the subjects I am going to
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study
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help
me

to tackle the challenges of the
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business
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world
with great intellect, and
thus
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allow
me to emerge as a

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leading
figure of the industry.

Besides
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contemporary
strategic
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management
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skills
with a
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perspective. A
dynamically
curated curriculum,

including Qualitative method in
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Finance
, Investment
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Management
, and Applied Corporate Finance

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courses encourages
me to enhance my
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under the influence of the intensive curriculum offered by

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your
reputed
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university
. Being a part of the excellent pedagogy of the top ranked
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business
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schools
of
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the


USA would serve as a gateway to tremendous
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opportunities
as I will gain
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knowledge
from the rich

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experiences
of varied professionals from
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different
industries.

The progressive and diverse environment, both
professionally
and
culturally
, built by your prestigious

University will be the
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perfect
source of
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global
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exposure
for my learning and
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skills
.
Furthermore
, I am

confident that my diligence and zeal to tackle the unknown would be the
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recipe to
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help
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a successful
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career
within the talented
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student
community, which would be nothing short of a dream

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come
true. My ideologies and ambition, combined with the vast platform set up by your institution,
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can


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bring
out the best results in the
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business
and
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sector. I know for sure; I will
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prove


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myself
, exhibit my
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skills
, abilities, and
indeed
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to your alumni ranks. I am anticipating a
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IELTS letter 5. If you have a concentration or area of interest in mind, briefly outline your interests in this area. 7. Activities and Engagements- What do you expect to contribute as a student and subsequently as a member of the profession?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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