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Zoos should be closed or not

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The presence of zoos in our cities and towns has been questioned a lot recently, and opinions differ about whether they provide benefits to people and animals, or whether they should be closed. Initially, we need to think about the negative issues with zoos. Many people believe it is wrong to take animals out of their natural environment and put them into cages. They believe that this is cruel and is only done to attract visitors and make money. In addition, many people feel that we should not interfere with nature, and if possible, animals should be allowed to stay in their own environment. In terms of alternatives, there are a few options that we have. Wildlife parks are becoming more popular in today’s world. These provide more space for animals to wander around and they provide a habitat which is more similar to animals’ natural homes. A more permanent solution which would enable us all to see animals in the wild would be for airlines to reduce their ticket prices. If air travel were cheaper, then we would all be able to see wild animals in their natural habitat and there would be no need for zoos in our cities. We should also promote channels on TV such as National Geographic. Here, people can see wildlife as it should be seen. As we can see, zoos are not the only way for humans to see and learn about wild animals. If there were no zoos, it would still be possible for scientists and ordinary people to preserve and experience nature.
The presence of zoos in our cities and towns has
been questioned
a lot recently, and opinions differ about whether they provide benefits to
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people
and
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animals
, or whether they should
be closed
.

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, we need to
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think
about the
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negative
issues with zoos.
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people
believe it is
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wrong
to take
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animals
out of their natural environment and put them into cages. They believe that this is cruel and is
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only
done to attract visitors and
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make
money.
In addition
,
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many
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people
feel that we should not interfere with nature, and if possible,
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animals
should be
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allowed
to stay in their
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own
environment.

In terms of alternatives, there are a few options that we have. Wildlife parks are becoming more popular in
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today
’s world. These provide more space for
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animals
to wander
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around and
they provide a habitat which is more similar to
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animals’
natural homes. A more permanent solution which would enable us all to
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see
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animals
in the wild would be for airlines to
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reduce
their ticket prices. If air travel were cheaper, then we would all be able to
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see
wild
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animals
in their natural habitat and there would be no need for zoos in our cities. We should
also
promote channels on TV such as National Geographic. Here,
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people
can
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see
wildlife as it should be
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seen
.

As we can
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see
, zoos are not the
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only
way for humans to
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see
and learn about wild
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animals
. If there were no zoos, it would
still
be possible for scientists and ordinary
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people
to preserve and experience nature.
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IELTS essay Zoos should be closed or not

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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