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zoos are sometimes necessary but are a poor alternative to the natural environment discuss arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos.

zoos are sometimes necessary but are a poor alternative to the natural environment discuss arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos. Va0A
In this newfangled era, there are immense changes took place in environment. It is considered that zoos plays vital role in every person life. On the contrary, it is dangerous for our environment. I have discussed both the viewpoints in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, it is an undeniable fact that zoos are important in every person life. Firstly, it is an entertainment source. As, a number of people go to zoos made a lot of fun as well as see different type of animals. Consequently, if person visit to zoo than they can easily know about different species. Secondly, these days some species are decline at an alarming rate. Therefore, zoos kept all new species as well as old species that people can easily gain knowledge of them. Individuals know about animal species if they visit zoo. To exemplify, in a leading newspaper it was mentioned that government build new zoo so that individuals can easily know about different species. on the other hand, zoos play dangerous impact on our environment. First of all, if you kept all the species then there are various dangerous aspects. Like, if individual go to different place then animal also deserve freedom. So if zoo do not kept animal into the zoo then it is beneficial for our environment. Second of all, there are some species that are the part of food chain so if food chain broke then there are numerous detrimental effect as the population of animals would be increase. To illustrate, in a survey it was mentioned that 80% of individual assert that animal do not kept in zoos because it put dangerous impact on our environment. To recapitulate, it can be deduced that zoos are entertainment source for children people as well people but I personally believe that if animals live in environment it is more accessible for our environment and there are myriad of positive aspects which cannot be overlooked.
In this newfangled era, there are immense
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changes
took place in
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environment
. It
is considered
that zoos plays vital role in every person life.
On the contrary
, it is
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dangerous
for our
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environment
. I have discussed both the viewpoints in the subsequent paragraphs.

On the one hand, it is an undeniable fact that zoos are
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important
in every person life.
Firstly
, it is an entertainment source. As, a number of
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people
go to zoos made
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a lot of
fun
as well
as
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see
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different
type of
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animals
.
Consequently
, if person visit to zoo than they can
easily
know about
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different
species.
Secondly
, these days
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some
species are decline at an alarming rate.
Therefore
, zoos
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kept
all new species
as well
as
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old
species that
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people
can
easily
gain knowledge of them.
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Individuals
know about
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animal
species if they visit zoo. To exemplify, in a leading newspaper it
was mentioned
that
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government
build new zoo
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so
that
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individuals
can
easily
know about
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different
species.

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on
the other hand, zoos play
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dangerous
impact on our
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environment
.
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First of all
, if you
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kept
all the species then there are various
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dangerous
aspects. Like, if
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individual
go to
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different
place then
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animal
also
deserve freedom.
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So
if zoo do not
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kept
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animal
into the zoo then it is beneficial for our
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environment
. Second of all, there are
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some
species that are the part of food chain
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so
if food chain broke then there are numerous detrimental effect as the population of
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animals
would be increase. To illustrate, in a survey it
was mentioned
that 80% of
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individual
assert that
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animal
do not
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kept
in zoos
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because
it put
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dangerous
impact on our environment.

To recapitulate, it can
be deduced
that zoos are entertainment source for children
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people
as well
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people
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but
I
personally
believe that if
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animals
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live
in
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environment
it is more accessible for our
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environment
and there are myriad of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
aspects which cannot
be overlooked
.

IELTS essay zoos are sometimes necessary but are a poor alternative to the natural environment discuss arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.0
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