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Your teacher has given you a large assignment that must be completed in one month. You can complete the assignment gradually by working on it a little bit each day, or you can complete the work quickly by working on it intensively for three or four days. v.1

Your teacher has given you a large assignment that must be completed in one month. You can complete the assignment gradually by working on it a little bit each day, or you can complete the work quickly by working on it intensively for three or four days. v. 1
It is true that the traditional family mealtime is becoming a thing of the past. There are some reasons which can be put forward to explain this changing pattern of behaviour, and there are significant impacts on family life and health. There are two obvious reasons why families no longer share mealtimes as they used to do in the past. Firstly, children are often too impatient to eat at the table, and parents sometimes allow them to have their meal in front of the TV or sitting in front of the computer. Secondly, the close-knit family is disappearing in the face of economic pressures. In single-parent households, or in families with working mothers, it can be almost impossible to arrange regular times for meals when all the family is together. The consequences for family life and for children’s health are serious. From the perspective of the family, meals taken together are an important feature of a stable family background. This stability of family routine is an essential factor in shaping children’s personality during their formative years. Family mealtimes are a time to share news, give guidance and to make plans together. In terms of children’s health, family meals were an opportunity to provide all the family members with a healthier diet, based on wholesome home-made food. Without this routine, children are sometimes left to have snacks, or to eat junk food at fast food chains. Health consequences such as obesity and hyperactivity often result when youngsters fail to eat a balanced diet, such as used to be provided at family mealtimes. In conclusion, some reasons can be identified for the decline in shared family meals and the impacts are overwhelmingly negative.
It is true that the traditional
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family
mealtime is becoming a thing of the past. There are
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some
reasons which can
be put
forward to
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explain
this changing pattern of
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behaviour
, and there are significant impacts on
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family
life and health.

There are two obvious reasons why
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families
no longer share mealtimes as they
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used
to do in the past.
Firstly
,
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children
are
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often
too impatient to eat at the table, and parents
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sometimes
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allow
them to have their
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meal
in front of the TV or sitting in front of the computer.
Secondly
, the close-knit
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family
is disappearing in the face of economic pressures. In single-parent households, or in
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families
with working mothers, it can be almost impossible to arrange regular times for
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meals
when all the
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family
is together.

The consequences for
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family
life and for
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children’s
health are serious. From the perspective of the
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family
,
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meals
taken together are an
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important
feature of a stable
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family
background. This stability of
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family
routine is an essential factor in shaping
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children’s
personality during their formative years.
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mealtimes are a time to share news, give guidance and to
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make
plans together. In terms of
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children’s
health,
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family
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meals
were an opportunity to provide all the
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family
members with a healthier diet, based on wholesome home-made food. Without this routine,
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children
are
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sometimes
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left
to have snacks, or to eat junk food at
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fast
food chains. Health consequences such as obesity and hyperactivity
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often
result when youngsters fail to eat a balanced diet, such as
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used
to
be provided
at
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family
mealtimes.

In conclusion
,
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some
reasons can
be identified
for the decline in shared
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family
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meals
and the impacts are
overwhelmingly
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negative
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Your teacher has given you a large assignment that must be completed in one month. You can complete the assignment gradually by working on it a little bit each day, or you can complete the work quickly by working on it intensively for three or four days. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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