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your teacher has asked you to write about a visit to the zoo.Write your description for your teacher.

your teacher has asked you to write about a visit to the zoo. Write your description for your teacher. Y2kKN
Tashkent national zoo is located the north of Tashkent city. It is extremely beautiful and attractive place for children. To start with, two years ago I and my family visited Tashkent national zoo. When you enter there, you feel yourself like a fairy tale. Because you can there magical heros of cartoons. They looks like as you tell ''welcome to our zoo''. There has 3 main buildings. Firstly, we can able to show big snakes and crocodiles. There are many kind of reptiles in the first building. If you visit there, do not go near them. Because very dangerous your life. Secondly, you may see all types birds next building. In my opinion that place the same as all birds' house in the world. Thirdly, children might watch different types of monkeys. For instance, there has Gorilla and Shipmanze and other kind of of big monkeys. If you go near them, they will try to play with you and if you want to feed them you may give them banana, because banana is their favourite food. In the yard, you can see other wild animals. For example, the king of animals lion, tigers, bears and deer, wolves, foxes and the others. Finally, Tashkent natoinal zoo is enrich emotions and the best place to relax.
Tashkent national zoo
is located
the north of Tashkent city. It is
extremely
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beautiful
and attractive place for children. To
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start
with, two years ago I and my family visited Tashkent national zoo. When you enter there, you feel yourself like a fairy tale.
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Because
you
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can there magical
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heros
of cartoons. They
The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "look"
looks
like as you
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tell
''welcome to our zoo''. There has 3 main buildings.
Firstly
, we
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can able to
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show
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big
snakes and crocodiles. There are
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many kind
of reptiles in the
first
building. If you visit there, do not go near them.
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Because
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very
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dangerous
your life.
Secondly
, you may
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see
all types birds
next
building. In my opinion that place the same as all birds'
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house
in the world.
Thirdly
, children might
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watch
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different
types of monkeys.
For instance
, there has Gorilla and
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Shipmanze
and other kind
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of of
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big
monkeys. If you go near them, they will try to play with you and if you want to feed them you may give them banana,
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because
banana is their
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favourite
food. In the yard, you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
other wild animals.
For example
, the king of animals lion, tigers, bears and deer, wolves, foxes and the others.
Finally
, Tashkent
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natoinal
zoo is enrich emotions and the best place to relax.
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IELTS essay your teacher has asked you to write about a visit to the zoo. Write your description for your teacher.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
214 words
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5.0
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