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Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.

Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does. Ajr9L

Jobs have never appealed to me. Born in a common family, I always regard job as something that I have to do in order to make a living. The reason why people regard the job as the source of happiness is beyond me. From my perspective, job only serves as a tool for us to earn enough money to survive. It is tedious and exhausting. My arguments for this point are listed as follows. First of all, for most, especially the young men, jobs bring them a feeling of oppression. It seems to be a tendency that the air of the office is as cold as frost and that the performance indicators act as whips tha. . .

You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskappointmentofficebusinesscareerassignment
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job
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have to
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enough
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 bring them a feeling of oppression. It seems to be a tendency that the air of the office is as This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :chillyfrosty
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