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A/D Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country.

A/D Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country. ljqaW
In a civilized society, any efforts to improve schools should be strongly supported. In my opinion, improving school is not to make campus more beautiful, but to spread the knowledge so that every citizen has opportunity to be educated and the country will be a better place. Therefore, we can say that the most critical step in the development of country is to improve school. My arguments for this point are listed as follows. First of all, improving school leads to the overall promotion in the quality of human beings. As you know, by improving schools, the learning environment will be more c. . .
In a civilized society, any efforts to
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supported. In my opinion, improving
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is not to
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to spread the knowledge
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that every citizen has opportunity to
be educated
and the country will be a better place.
Therefore
, we can say that the most critical step in the development of country is to
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improve
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school
. My arguments for this point
are listed
as follows.

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First of all
, improving
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school
leads to the
overall
promotion in the quality of human beings. As you know, by improving
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schools
, the learning environment will be more c.
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IELTS essay A/D Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
105 words
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