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Your first time away from home

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Home itself is a word with a very strong definition that quite differs from a house, Home is a place of utmost comfort, familiar faces, and loved ones around with each wall emphasizing the history of your stay at this very place. On the other hand, House is just an emotionless word that defines to a place/property owned or rented for accommodation. Eventually, being surrounded by the same people every hour of each day might make one frustrated or crave for privacy, but to one’s surprise, only a few hours of residing away from family makes us homesick. I have stayed with my parents always, if not with one of my family members or closed ones. But October of 2018 was the first time I ever had to stay away from my home and the knowledge of the fact that I won’t be visiting home anytime sooner than a couple of months added to the burden. I had to sign up in a Paying Guest Cottage (well known as P. G. in India) in order to live closer to my college during midterm exams. The P. G. was just on the other side of my college’s premises. It was a small 10x12 feet room with two beds and a joint washroom, which I fortunately got to share with my classmate itself. The rent was very much in sync with my budget. The day I arrived at the P. G. with all my necessary belongings can be clearly pictured in my head. I greeted the landlord at the ground floor as she brought me some snacks and water to my room. Although I kept myself busy with arranging my belongings from the very beginning that I entered my room, subconsciously I was only trying to delay the realization of me being away from home for the first time. Initially, I was very excited by the thought of this change in my residence which would save me hours of travelling to college each day, but only a few hours later did I realize that I already was missing my room and how my belongings were perfectly arranged as per my taste. When I first ordered my lunch, I already started missing the home-cooked food that I dined with my parents every day. Even though it took me almost a week to adapt to my new residence, it was a very unique experience staying away from home and only made me better and more aware of things that needed t be taken care of at home.
Home itself is a word with a
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very
strong definition that quite differs from a
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house
, Home is a place of utmost comfort, familiar faces, and
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loved
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ones
around with each wall emphasizing the history of your stay at this
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very
place.
On the other hand
,
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House
is
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just
an emotionless word that defines to a place/property
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
or rented for accommodation.
Eventually
,
being surrounded
by the same
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people
every
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hour
of each day might
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make
one frustrated or crave for privacy,
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but
to one’s surprise,
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only
a few
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hours
of residing
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away
from family
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makes
us homesick.

I have stayed with my parents always, if not with one of my family members or closed
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ones
.
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But
When specifying a month and year, 'of' is unnecessary: "October 2018".
October of 2018
was the
first
time I ever had to stay
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away
from my home and the knowledge of the fact that I won’t be visiting home anytime sooner than a couple of months
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added
to the burden. I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
up in a Paying Guest Cottage (well known as P. G. in India) in order to
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live
closer to my college during midterm exams. The P. G. was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
on the other side of my college’s premises. It was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
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10x12
feet
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room
with two beds and a joint washroom, which I
fortunately
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
to share with my classmate itself. The rent was
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very
much in sync with my budget.

The day I arrived at the P. G. with all my necessary belongings can be
clearly
pictured in my head. I greeted the landlord at the
This word is British English. Did you mean "first floor"?
ground floor
as she brought me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
snacks and water to my
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room
. Although I
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kept
myself busy with arranging my belongings from the
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very
beginning that I entered my
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room
,
subconsciously
I was
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only
trying to delay the realization of me being
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
away
from home for the
first
time.
Initially
, I was
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very
excited by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
of this
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change
in my residence which would save me
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hours
of travelling to college each day,
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but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
a few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
later did I realize that I already was missing my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
and how my belongings were
perfectly
arranged as per my taste. When I
first
ordered my lunch, I already
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
missing the home-cooked food that I dined with my parents every day.

Even though
it took me almost a week to adapt to my new residence, it was a
Consider using "unique".
very unique
experience staying
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away
from home and
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only
made me better and more aware of things that needed t
be taken
care of at home.
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IELTS essay Your first time away from home

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
423 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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