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“Your first impressions when you meet someone are always right. ”Do you agree with this statement? Write your essay giving your opinion using examples from your own experience. v.7

“Your first impressions when you meet someone are always right. ” Write your essay giving your opinion using examples from your own experience. v. 7
In previous years, numerous low budget shops have been discontinued due to the reason that shoppers nowadays prefer to purchase items from huge shopping centres. In my opinion, this is a negative development because the local shopkeepers have lost their livelihoods, and the prices of goods in large shopping malls are quite unreasonable. To commence with, due to large shopping places being formed and local small shops being shut, the local shopkeepers have lost their employment. Earlier, all the citizens in the vicinity of local shops use to buy items from these shops, which has been discontinued. Consequently, the shopkeepers find it challenging to run their shops profitably. Providing convincing evidence, a recent study by the prestigious Oxford University has found that 60% of the shopkeepers have to work double shifts for their sustenance due to the decline in their shop's business. Continuing with the drawbacks of large shopping malls, the customers have to pay huge amounts of money to buy commodities or to avail any services. To elaborate more, it can be seen as a disadvantage to the shoppers because earlier they use to purchase things at much cheaper prices from the local vendors. All the facilities and goods are present at the same place in a shopping mall; nevertheless, the prices are excessively high. For instance, I bought a pair of trousers from Select city mall whose price was 15% more than its price at a local shop. In conclusion, the growth of shopping centres is a sign of development in a country; however, small local shop's closure is a negative development over the years. From my perception, the local shops should also be promoted as they are the livelihood for some masses.
In previous years, numerous low budget
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shops
have
been discontinued
due to the reason that shoppers nowadays prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
items from huge
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shopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
. In my opinion, this is a
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negative
development
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because
the
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local
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shopkeepers
have lost their livelihoods, and the
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prices
of
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goods
in large
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shopping
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malls
are quite unreasonable.

To commence with, due to large
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shopping
places
being formed
and
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local
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small
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shops
being shut
, the
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local
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shopkeepers
have lost their employment. Earlier, all the citizens in the vicinity of
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local
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shops
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use to
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buy
items from these
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shops
, which has
been discontinued
.
Consequently
, the
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shopkeepers
find it challenging to run their
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shops
profitably
. Providing convincing evidence, a recent study by the prestigious Oxford University has found that 60% of the
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shopkeepers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work double shifts for their sustenance due to the decline in their shop's business.

Continuing with the drawbacks of large
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shopping
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malls
, the customers
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have to
pay huge amounts of money to
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buy
commodities or to avail any services. To elaborate more, it can be
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seen
as a disadvantage to the shoppers
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because
earlier they
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use to
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purchase
things at much cheaper
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prices
from the
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local
vendors. All the facilities and
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goods
are present at the same place in a
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shopping
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mall
;
nevertheless
, the
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prices
are
excessively
high.
For instance
, I
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bought
a pair of trousers from Select city
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mall
whose
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price
was 15% more than its
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price
at a
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local
shop.

In conclusion
, the growth of
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shopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
is a
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sign
of development in a country;
however
,
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small
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local
shop's closure is a
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negative
development over the years. From my perception, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
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shops
should
also
be promoted
as they are the livelihood for
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some
masses.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay “Your first impressions when you meet someone are always right. ” Write your essay giving your opinion using examples from your own experience. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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