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your experiences and feelings after the program

your experiences and feelings after the program Q5GRw
Last summer, I took part in a reality program and have a chance to experience activities for a day a poor family in a strange place. It was in June when the harvest time started. The reason I participated in the programme was because I want to challenge yourself with the jobs that I have never done. That day, I helped people there harvest their crops. When I first started I was very difficult for sickle and use it. More difficulty is to work under sunshine in the summer. After finish a work, i felt very tired but it so funny. Because i had one day to work hard, we get worthy result. Working with a poor family so happy because they are friendly and help me a lot. In short, I promised to study harder to get a better job because working on paddy fields was really hard and difficult.
Last summer, I
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in a reality program and have a chance to experience activities for a day a poor family in a strange place. It was in June when the harvest time
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started
. The reason I participated in the
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programme
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because
I want to challenge yourself with the jobs that I have never done. That day, I
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helped
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people
there harvest their crops. When I
first
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started
I was
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very
difficult for sickle and
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use
it. More difficulty is to work under sunshine in the summer. After finish a work,
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i
felt
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very
tired
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but
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it
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so
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funny
.
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Because
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i
had one day to work
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hard
, we
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get
worthy result. Working with a poor family
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so
happy
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because
they are friendly and
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help
me a lot. In short, I promised to study harder to
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get
a better job
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because
working on paddy fields was
really
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hard
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IELTS essay your experiences and feelings after the program

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
151 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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