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Your English teacher has asked you to write a story. Your story must begin with this sentence: • I wanted to leave the city as soon as possible. Write your story in about 100 words on your answer sheet.

Your English teacher has asked you to write a story. Your story must begin with this sentence: • I wanted to leave the city as soon as possible. Write your story in about 100 words on your answer sheet. D6Knm
I wanted to leave the city as soon as possible. 2 years ago, I had to leave my hometown to study university in Ho Chi Minh city that it is a busy and modern place in VietNam. I was ready everything to study and live at this city. I felt sad and miss my home although the city had many fantastic views to visit and enjoy. I also had many friends in that place but I was disappointed about my decision. Everything in there was not like my hometown. Besides, it’s more polluted than the place I was born. I could see rubbish at many places such as lake, river, bridge, …. It was so dirty because the residents didn’t clean their environment around them. They had no sense of environment protection. Even it’s too noisy to concentrate on studying or working. I was used to peace of my home. Until now, after that difficult time, I feel good about everything in this city because I can keep up with the life way of them. In addition, thanks to city policies about improve environment and their life, everything is better than before.
I wanted to
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leave
the city as
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soon
as possible. 2 years ago, I had to
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leave
my hometown to study university in
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Ho Chi Minh city
that it is a busy and modern
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place
in
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VietNam
. I was ready
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everything
to study and
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live
at this city. I felt sad and miss my home although the city had
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many
fantastic views to visit and enjoy.
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I
also
had
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many
friends in that
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place
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but
I
was disappointed
about my decision.
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Everything
in there was not like my hometown.

Besides
, it’s more polluted than the
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place
I
was born
. I could
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see
rubbish at
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many
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places
such as lake, river, bridge, …. It was
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so
dirty
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because
the residents didn’t clean their environment around them. They had no sense of environment protection. Even it’s too noisy to concentrate on studying or working. I was
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used
to peace of my home.

Until
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now
, after that difficult time, I feel
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good
about
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everything
in this city
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because
I can
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keep
up with the life way of them.
In addition
, thanks to city policies about
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improve
environment and their life,
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everything
is better than
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before
.
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IELTS essay Your English teacher has asked you to write a story. Your story must begin with this sentence: • I wanted to leave the city as soon as possible. Write your story in about 100 words on your answer sheet.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
192 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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