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Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: •Say why you would like to go•Suggest what yo v.1

Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: •Say why you would like to go•Suggest what yo v. 1
In recent days, travelling has become a passion for many people. However, many individuals have become prejudiced travelling abroad instead of being open minded. There could be several reasons for this mentality. Giving viable solutions can help to resolve the issue. This essay will attempt to examine all significant components in detail. To begin with, travelling internationally results in meeting a lot of new people and getting associated with different culture. People fear to interact with the localities as they are of the assumption that foreigners are not accepted with open hands. This is because of their preconceived thinking. Second, racism still exists in many countries. Travellers believe that they might be judged on their skin colour or from the country they have come. For instance, many South Africans and criticized on the basis of their colour when they travel in European Countries. Also, there are crimes recorded against the locals attacking travellers coming from a distant country as they want a selective group of people to visit their nation. However, there are few solutions the government can incorporate the help these avid travellers visiting their nation. Imposing strict regulations and penalties if crimes are recorded against a tourist from the locals. Additionally, educating people in developing a friendly behaviour with tourist which will improve the country's reputation globally. If foreigners are welcomed with a smile, it will increase tourism and boost the economy of the country. For example, Indonesia is one country where tourists are seen all round they year and the people earn their livelihood through tourism. In conclusion, though people's thinking patterns are difficult to alter. However, steps such as strict action against crime toward travellers command equal consideration. Bringing this essay to a close, there is little doubt that we are faced with a serious problem. Nevertheless, suitable solutions do exist.
In recent days, travelling has become a passion for
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many
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.
However
,
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many
individuals have become prejudiced travelling abroad
instead
of being
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open minded
. There could be several reasons for this mentality. Giving viable solutions can
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help
to resolve the issue. This essay will attempt to examine all significant components in detail.

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begin
with, travelling
internationally
results in meeting
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a lot of
new
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people
and getting associated with
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different
culture.
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People
fear to interact with the localities as they are of the assumption that foreigners are not
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accepted
with open hands. This is
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because
of their preconceived thinking. Second, racism
still
exists in
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many
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countries
.
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Travellers
believe that they might
be judged
on their skin
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colour
or from the
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country
they have
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come
.
For instance
,
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many
South Africans and criticized on the basis of their
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colour
when they travel in European
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Countries
.
Also
, there are crimes recorded against the locals attacking
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travellers
coming from a distant
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country
as they want a selective group of
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people
to visit their nation.

However
, there are few solutions the
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government
can incorporate the
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help
these avid
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travellers
visiting their nation. Imposing strict regulations and penalties if crimes
are recorded
against a tourist from the locals.
Additionally
, educating
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people
in developing a friendly
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behaviour
with tourist which will
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improve
the country's reputation globally. If foreigners
are welcomed
with a smile, it will increase tourism and boost the economy of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
.
For example
, Indonesia is one
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country
where tourists are
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seen
all round
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they year
and the
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people
earn their livelihood through tourism.

In conclusion
, though
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people
's thinking patterns are difficult to alter.
However
, steps such as strict action against crime toward
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travellers
command equal consideration. Bringing this essay to a close, there is
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little
doubt that we
are faced
with a serious problem.
Nevertheless
, suitable solutions do exist.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: •Say why you would like to go•Suggest what yo v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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