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Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join. . explain about the trip. . explain why your brother couldn't make it. . giving details about the trip. v.1

Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join. . explain about the trip. . explain why your brother couldn't make it. . giving details about the trip. v. 1
Climate Change is becoming an ultimately heated topic among nations. While it is believed by some people that preventing such a threat to the environment is essential, others think we should just adapt to it. This essay will argue why it's totally preposterous to think that our environment could survive global warming or other climate related disasters without doing anything to prevent that. Despite the major risks, it is believed that controlling the earth's temperature is beyond our power. Because it is connected to many other factors none of which can be stopped or even predicted. For instance, ocean levels are rising when volcanic eruptions occur which makes the temperature of the water much more higher. Therefore, climate change is not necessarily something we can always prevent. In contrast, scientists and environmental experts endeavor new approaches to face the fact that the universe is much more heated than ever. They believe so because many attempts have been tried already with great success. For example, Japan performs experimental trials each year and tests the effects of such experiments on the environment. It is for these reasons, it would be logical to think a lot can be done to protect the environment from the rising heat. In conclusion, it sounds really easier to just find a way to deal with the detrimental effects of the heated atmosphere instead of preventing them. This essay argued why this is extremely inaccurate. In my opinion, ignoring the problem without trying to solve it is totally unacceptable and only makes it worse.
Climate
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Change
is becoming an
ultimately
heated topic among nations. While it
is believed
by
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some
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people
that preventing such a threat to the
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environment
is essential, others
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think
we should
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just
adapt to it. This essay will argue why it's
totally
preposterous to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
could survive global warming or other climate related disasters without doing anything to
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prevent
that.

Despite the major
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risks
, it
is believed
that controlling the earth's temperature is beyond our power.
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Because
it
is connected
to
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many
other factors none of which can be
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stopped
or even predicted.
For instance
, ocean levels are rising when volcanic eruptions occur which
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makes
the temperature of the water much
Use only "higher" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more higher
.
Therefore
, climate
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change
is not
necessarily
something we can always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
.

In contrast
, scientists and environmental experts endeavor new approaches to face the fact that the universe is much more heated than ever. They believe
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so
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because
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
attempts have
been tried
already with great success.
For example
, Japan performs experimental trials each year and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tests
the effects of such experiments on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. It is for these reasons, it would be logical to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
a lot can
be done
to protect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
from the rising heat.

In conclusion
, it sounds
really
easier to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
find a way to deal with the detrimental effects of the heated atmosphere
instead
of preventing them. This essay argued why this is
extremely
inaccurate. In my opinion, ignoring the problem without trying to solve it is
totally
unacceptable and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it worse.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Your brother couldn't join you on a trip that you guys planned. Write a letter to a friend inviting him to join. . explain about the trip. . explain why your brother couldn't make it. . giving details about the trip. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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