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You want to take a course related to your work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter, you should: describe what the course isexplain how it will benefit the companygive suitable time schedule. v.1

You want to take a course related to your work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter, you should: describe what the course isexplain how it will benefit the companygive suitable time schedule. v. 1
In the United Kingdom, individuals when reaches the old age usually spend their lives in old age homes where caretakers take care of them. Occasionally, the government has the responsibility to pay for the retirement homes. This essay agrees that it is the duty of the political party in power to take care of the elder population. This essay will first, outline that old people when are young pay huge taxes to the ministry for such amenities and second, families are already burdened to meet the expenses of their children and other basic needs. Elderly people during their younger ages have paid tariffs to the government for the development of old age home, where they will get basic facilities and a warm environment. This is to say, the government has collected a huge amount of taxes from people, which they must spend on building retirement homes for elderlies where there are professional nurses to look after their physical and mental health. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The New York Times found that more than 80 percent of taxes collected by the government are used in constructing old age homes. Furthermore, families of older people are already burdened with several responsibilities and thus, they cannot incur extra costs for retirement homes. In other words, the families of older people have to incur financial expense in order to meet the basic amenities of their children, along with this paying for retirement homes will put them in financial constraints. For instance, a recent study by The Times showed that more than 60 percent of the families of older people have financial burdens and constraints and hence, they are not able to pay their care and well being. To conclude, although some people believe that families must incur the expenses of old people's wellbeing and safekeeping. However, In my opinion, I vehemently agree that the ministry should ensure to take care of older people as they have paid huge taxes to the ministry and the families already have huge financial stress.
In the United Kingdom, individuals when reaches the
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age
usually
spend their
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in
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old
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age
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homes
where caretakers take
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care
of them.
Occasionally
, the
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government
has the responsibility to pay for the
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retirement
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homes
. This essay
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agrees
that it is the duty of the political party in power to take
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care
of the elder population. This essay will
first
, outline that
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old
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people
when are young pay
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huge
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taxes
to the ministry for such amenities and second,
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families
are already burdened to
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meet
the expenses of their children and other basic needs.

Elderly
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people
during their younger
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ages
have paid tariffs to the
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government
for the development of
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old
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age
home, where they will
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get
basic facilities and a warm environment. This is to say, the
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government
has collected a
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huge
amount of
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taxes
from
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people
, which they
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must
spend on building
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retirement
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homes
for
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elderlies
where there are professional nurses to look after their physical and mental health. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The New York Times found that more than 80 percent of
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taxes
collected by the
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government
are
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used
in constructing
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old
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age
homes.

Furthermore
,
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families
of
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older
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people
are already burdened with several responsibilities and
thus
, they cannot incur extra costs for
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retirement
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homes
.
In other words
, the
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families
of
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older
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people
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have to
incur
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financial
expense in order to
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meet
the basic amenities of their children, along with this paying for
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retirement
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homes
will put them in
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financial
constraints.
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, a recent study by The Times
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showed
that more than 60 percent of the
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older
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have
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financial
burdens and constraints and
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, they are not able to pay their
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well being
.

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, although
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people
believe that
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families
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must
incur the expenses of
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old
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people
's
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wellbeing
and safekeeping.
However
, In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
that the ministry should ensure to take
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care
of
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older
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people
as they have paid
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huge
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taxes
to the ministry and the
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families
already have
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stress
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You want to take a course related to your work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter, you should: describe what the course isexplain how it will benefit the companygive suitable time schedule. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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