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Youngers are being allowed unsupervised visitors to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends

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It is common knowledge, that in the modern world with unlimited access to social media for everyone, including children and teenagers, can lead to terrifying consequences for them, such as kidnapping or extortion. Several solutions can be made for the exact purpose of protecting children, such as installing special applications with location determination or closed access to the sites with undefined owners or content. Scientists have been starting to discover how to protect children for a long period since the children receive access to the Internet, and they created special applications for adults, to be able to know where their children are. To protect children from kidnapping or visiting invalid places, content creators made such apps, where parents can follow the destination of their children and be able to locate places, where they are spending time with their friends. To know with whom and where an underage person spends his free time is a duty of their parents and nowadays it seems that the only possibility to be aware of that is to use such apps. Another possibility to protect children is to put specific sites, that collect information about location, calls, contacts, under restrictions. Modern technologies let parents close access to some potentially dangerous pages on Internet, while children would be allowed to visit only checked sites, which protect personal data. Blackmails would not be able to use personal information to steal money or get to know more about children’s family with the following aim to extort. Summing up everything that has been started so far, children of the 21st century are in danger because of social media influence. Teenagers visit potentially dangerous sites, where people can follow their location, use their private data, collect essential information about a child and using all of this information adults can use against them or even can kidnap or extort them. There are several solutions that could be identified as indeed, such as the opportunity for parents to know where their children by using special identification in applications and the second solution are to set limitation for unchecking sites.
It is common knowledge, that in the modern world with unlimited
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access
to social media for everyone, including
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children
and
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teenagers
, can lead to terrifying consequences for them, such as kidnapping or extortion. Several solutions can
be made
for the exact purpose of protecting
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children
, such as installing special applications with location determination or closed
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access
to the
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sites
with undefined owners or content.

Scientists have been starting to discover how to
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protect
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children
for a long period since the
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children
receive
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access
to the Internet, and they created special applications for adults, to be able to
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know
where their
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children
are. To
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protect
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children
from kidnapping or visiting invalid places, content creators made such apps, where
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parents
can follow the destination of their
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children
and be able to locate places, where they are spending time with their friends. To
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know
with whom and where an underage person spends his free time is a duty of their
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parents
and nowadays it seems that the
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only
possibility to be aware of
that is
to
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use
such apps.

Another possibility
to
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protect
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children
is to put specific
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sites
, that collect
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information
about location, calls, contacts, under restrictions. Modern technologies
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let
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parents
close
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access
to
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some
potentially
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dangerous
pages on Internet, while
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children
would be
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allowed
to visit
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only
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checked
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sites
, which
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protect
personal data. Blackmails would not be able to
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use
personal
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information
to steal money or
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get
to
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know
more about
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children’s
family with the following aim to extort.

Summing up everything that has been
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started
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so
far,
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children
of the 21st century are in
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danger
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because
of social media influence.
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Teenagers
visit
potentially
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dangerous
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sites
, where
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people
can follow their location,
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use
their private data, collect essential
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information
about a child and using all of this
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information
adults can
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use
against them or even can kidnap or extort them. There are several solutions that could
be identified
as
indeed
, such as the opportunity for
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parents
to
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know
where their
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children
by using special identification in applications and the second solution are to set limitation for unchecking
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sites
.
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IELTS essay Youngers are being allowed unsupervised visitors to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
6.0
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