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money cannot buy happeness

money cannot buy happeness D6NyE
It is commonly known that having a lot of money does not equal being a happy person because happiness is an inner sense of being emotionally satisfied with your life. Happiness has a variety of different meanings for every person, that changes with ages, life situation and people around, that is why it is hard to determine what happiness is. There are a lot of ways of achieving felicity, but they are diverse because of people’s values. Happiness does not have its system of measures, it is impossible to give an assignment or rate it, therefore it is usually unreal to name happiness by one word, describe these feelings, emotions or spirit conditions. From the beginning of the world existing every philosopher has given his definition of happiness, depending on a variety of reasons. For someone, happiness consists of such essentials as good relations in the family, in partnerships, at work, whilst for others, happiness determines the number of achievements, amount of money in their bank accounts, amount of cars, houses and travelling trips during the year. We are all different and what is suitable, for example, for Africans will not be suitable for Americans and vice versa. Some scientists said that there is no opportunity to reach happiness, while others said that happiness inside us and only we can find it and identify it. Usually, people name a lot of reasons to be happy: build a house, get married, get pregnant, get vacations on the beach, have million dollars, hump with a parachute, swim with whales and after completing those gaps you will feel happiness. To my mind, it is possible to achieve felicity only by being completely satisfied with all spheres of life, using, for instance, the so-called “balance wheel”. Each part of this wheel consists of the main elements that describe life in common, filling all of these spheres will help to reach happiness and satisfaction of living. There are no two identical people and there are no two people with the same understanding of how to be a happy person, therefore it is difficult to name happiness. The only opportunity to be a happy person is to find happiness inside yourself, having all your spheres of life in balance.
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person
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because
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happiness
is an inner sense of being
emotionally
satisfied with your
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has a variety of
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different
meanings for every
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person
, that
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changes
with ages,
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life
situation and
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people
around,
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why it is
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hard
to determine what
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happiness
is. There are
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a lot of
ways of achieving felicity,
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but
they are diverse
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because
of
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people’s
values.

Happiness does not have its system of measures, it is impossible to give an assignment or rate it,
therefore
it is
usually
unreal to name
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happiness
by one word,
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describe
these feelings, emotions or spirit conditions. From the beginning of the world existing every philosopher has
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given
his definition of
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happiness
, depending on a variety of reasons. For someone,
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happiness
consists of such essentials as
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good
relations in the family, in partnerships, at work, whilst for others,
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happiness
determines the number of achievements, amount of money in their bank accounts, amount of cars,
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houses
and travelling trips during the year. We are all
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different
and what is suitable,
for example
, for Africans will not be suitable for Americans and vice versa.

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Some
scientists said that there is no opportunity to reach
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happiness
, while others said that
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happiness
inside us and
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only
we can find it and identify it.
Usually
,
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people
name
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a lot of
reasons to be
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: build a
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house
,
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get
married,
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pregnant,
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vacations on the beach, have
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million
dollars, hump with a parachute, swim with whales and after completing those gaps you will feel
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happiness
. To my mind, it is possible to achieve felicity
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only
by being completely satisfied with all spheres of
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life
, using,
for instance
, the
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so
-called “balance wheel”. Each part of this wheel consists of the main elements that
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describe
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life
in common, filling all of these spheres will
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help
to reach
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happiness
and satisfaction of living.

There are no two identical
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people
and there are no two
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people
with the same understanding of how to be a
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happy
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person
,
therefore
it is difficult to name
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happiness
. The
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only
opportunity to be a
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happy
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person
is to find
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happiness
inside yourself, having all your spheres of
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life
in balance.
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IELTS essay money cannot buy happeness

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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