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British donations to the charity in a certain period of time

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Over time the british people have given charity in the years of 1990 and 2010, which in analysis there have been many differences between those two years. At the first year of the charity all was increasing well, until it got to the point that people of 51 and up dropped donations, not much but there was a change. Then observing the charity of the following year there was a lot of difference that in the first year, almost in all ages it had decreased but in the last two ages it had increased more than what they gave in the first year so that was a gain Comparing and already analyzing the difference of the two years my conclusion was that in the first year was when the charity had grown well with almost all ages, had changes but not as drastic as the second year, so the first was a good year of donations
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in the years of 1990 and 2010, which in analysis there have been
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differences between those two years.

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of the
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all was increasing well, until it
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of 51 and up dropped donations, not much
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there was a
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. Then observing the
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of the following
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there was
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, almost in all ages it had decreased
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in the last two ages it had increased more than what they gave in the
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gain


Comparing and already analyzing the difference of the two years my conclusion was that in the
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first
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year
was when the
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charity
had grown well with almost all ages, had
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changes
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but
not as drastic as the second
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year
,
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was a
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of donations
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IELTS essay British donations to the charity in a certain period of time

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
155 words
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