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Younger often spend their time for doing outside activities

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These days, some people say that children must stop their activities for playing games instead to going outside. Recently, youngers often are wasting their time in indoor activities, which is the activities who taking much time or not make them feel tired. Usually, I believe that they just want to lose boring activities. Firstly, youngers people just think indoor activities are much better. Playing games for example, they often believe its are one of activities that they be able to do also it bring a happiness for them. Moreover, they do not need to go outside because everything is available in this modern era such as games in mobile phone and do social media. Secondly, indoor activities are more convenient and assist to eliminate tired outside activities. it

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some
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people
 say that children This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
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activities
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 to going outside. Recently, youngers The adverb 'often' usually goes after the verb 'are'.are often
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, I believe that they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
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 want to lose boring activities.

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because
 everything is available in this modern era such as games in mobile phone and do social media.

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