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Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be. Others say that people only continue their education because the opportunities exist for them to v.1

Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be. Others say that people only continue their education because the opportunities exist for them to v. 1
Although, developed countries provide monetary support to poorer countries, it does not solve the poverty. Instead of giving the financial support to the third world nations, wealthier countries should also give different kind of aid to them. This essay will discuss on how rich countries should help poorer countries. The developed nations have often provided monetary assistance to the developing nations and adopted them. However, such monetary help will not solve the poverty issue. This is mainly because poor countries will not only need the financial support, but will also need support in administrative, technological and logistical areas. For example, the developed country Asu has been providing funds to the Rop, but it never came out of the difficulties. Instead, this poor nation is now known to be misusing the money. The wealthier nations should provide both money and work together with the receiving countries. While giving funds is certainly a great aid, the wealthier nations must also ensure that these funds are used for the benefit of the society. Often, poorer countries lack basic infrastructure and are heavily corrupted. The experts in rich countries should educate the adopted countries to ensure that the knowledge transfer happens and transparency is established. Thereby, ensuring that the money is spent in uplifting the country from its poverty. To recapitulate, I think that the wealthier countries should provide financial assistance and also support poorer countries with other means such as administrative, technological support and so on so forth. Finally, I think that both the developed and the developing nations must collaborate to improve the conditions and solve the poverty problem.
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provide monetary
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support
to
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poorer
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countries
, it does not solve the poverty.
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of giving the financial
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support
to the third world
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nations
,
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wealthier
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countries
should
also
give
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different
kind of aid to them. This essay will discuss on how rich
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countries
should
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help
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poorer
countries.

The
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developed
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nations
have
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often
provided monetary assistance to the developing
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nations
and adopted them.
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, such monetary
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help
will not solve the poverty issue. This is
mainly
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because
poor
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will not
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only
need the financial
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support
,
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will
also
need
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in administrative, technological and logistical areas.
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, the
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developed
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country
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Asu
has been providing funds to the
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Rop
,
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but
it never came out of the difficulties.
Instead
, this poor
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is
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now
known to be misusing the money.

The
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wealthier
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nations
should provide both money and work together with the receiving
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countries
. While giving funds is
certainly
a great aid, the
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wealthier
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nations
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must
also
ensure that these funds are
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used
for the benefit of the society.
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,
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poorer
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countries
lack basic infrastructure and are
heavily
corrupted. The experts in rich
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countries
should educate the adopted
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countries
to ensure that the knowledge transfer happens and transparency
is established
. Thereby, ensuring that the money
is spent
in uplifting the
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country
from its poverty.

To recapitulate, I
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think
that the
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wealthier
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countries
should provide financial assistance and
also
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support
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poorer
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countries
with other means such as administrative, technological
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support
and
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so
on
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so
forth.
Finally
, I
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think
that both the
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developed
and the developing
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nations
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must
collaborate to
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improve
the conditions and solve the poverty problem.
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IELTS essay Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be. Others say that people only continue their education because the opportunities exist for them to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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