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Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? it is better to have broad knowledge ofmany academic subjects than to specialize inone specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answer. v.1

it is better to have broad knowledge ofmany academic subjects than to specialize inone specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answer. v. 1
People hold different views about whether there should be more or less control over children. While there are some strong arguments against the setting of children’s strict controls, I believe that children need the high standards of discipline. There are several reasons why people might argue that children should not be controlled strictly. Firstly, children will have confidence in themselves in the future if they do not have to reluctantly obey certain kinds of rules. For example, giving freedom from too many strict regulations at school assists them to take an active involvement in lessons. Secondly, not having to follow orders helps them to have much success in their higher education. More importantly, it is beneficial for them to develop an independent study habit which prepares them to work autonomously. However, I would agree with those who believe that it is significant to sufficiently regulate those children who are concerned. The main reason for this view is that having such kinds of ground rules teaches youngsters to feel a strong sense of responsibility towards their future life. For instance, they always tend to do something to improve their life-long experience instead of wasting their valuable time. Another factor for this opinion is that carefully regulated children will probably make a success in their workplaces such as career progression and job prospects in their later life. In conclusion, although there are clear arguments against supervising children amply, I am of the opinion that complying with significant rules is a necessary burden.
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different
views about whether there should be more or less control over
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children
. While there are
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some
strong arguments against the setting of
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children’s
strict controls, I believe that
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children
need the high standards of discipline.

There are several reasons why
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people
might argue that
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children
should not
be controlled
strictly
.
Firstly
,
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children
will have confidence in themselves in the future if they do not
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have to
reluctantly
obey certain kinds of
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rules
.
For example
, giving freedom from too
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strict regulations at school assists them to take an active involvement in lessons.
Secondly
, not having to follow orders
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helps
them to have much success in their higher education. More
importantly
, it is beneficial for them to develop an independent study habit which prepares them to work
autonomously
.

However
, I would
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agree
with those who believe that it is significant to
sufficiently
regulate those
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children
who
are concerned
. The main reason for this view is that having such kinds of ground
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rules
teaches youngsters to feel a strong sense of responsibility towards their future life.
For instance
, they always tend to do something to
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improve
their life-long experience
instead
of wasting their valuable time. Another factor for this opinion is that
carefully
regulated
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children
will
probably
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make
a success in their workplaces such as career progression and job prospects in their later life.

In conclusion
, although there are
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clear
arguments against supervising
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children
amply
, I am of the opinion that complying with significant
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rules
is a necessary burden.
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IELTS essay it is better to have broad knowledge ofmany academic subjects than to specialize inone specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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