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Young people should be ambitious in order to succeed in life

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Some people in the world want to their children to be a good children in their future life. We came across such kind of issue that is young generation must be aim for their life. I strongly agree with statment. I will explain with some examples in this essey. In my opinion, every young person should have goal to live and future plan. Because they will work different kind of profession. Several student have interesting some kind of spheries, then it may change ambitions. If they have opportunities for acting it is quite succesful for next life. Convienents must be given by parents for pupils they can improve own aim. On the other hand parents may choose their children's working place or future plans, ao they say that young people have not to be aim for future life. They may have big companies so parentsheritage their work for them. In conclution, young people must have ambition. Because it mustneed their future life.
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IELTS essay Young people should be ambitious in order to succeed in life

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
162 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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