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Young people hold important position in government. Some say it is good, others say it is unsuitable.

Young people hold important position in government. Some say it is good, others say it is unsuitable. oErNw
With increase in broad education word wide in youth, youngsters has started to playing vital roles in politics as well. To this upward trend in youngsters, of getting a higher position in government, there's hidden good times for some citizens. On the contrary, there are a number of people who does not believe in this. In this essay, I will discuss both the views and sum up with why youngsters should be given a chance. Firstly, with the increasing sense of judiciary and politics, youth has understood the need of change in system. Due to this, there are quite a lot young people who wants to apply some new idea towards the government systems. Today, the quality of education has increased significantly. Thus, the youth of today is well educated and well informed about the government's policies and programs. It is said that, a countries future lies in the hand of youth of that country. Although, it is not because they are governing the country. But, to suggest that they will have to govern over it in future. By giving youth a chance, they can implement new ideas and new ways of controlling the country. Yet, without any experience it might get pretty troublesome. On the contrary, the people already governing the country has experience and understanding of inner work flow of country. Unlike new schoolers, they have an upper hand over maintaining the perfect harmony with all the aspects of country. Experienced personal is not likely to do anything new which in terms is risky. However, by using their vast knowledge of the field they wouldn't find any need of implying new strategies. They will easily control any troublesome problem merely with their knowledge. Having said that, it is not as if there won't be any need of new plans, because as we know government always tries to apply new applications and rules to attain more profit and safety of country. Although, they might lack the creativity or idealistic mindset to start with. Due to their reliance on their prior knowledge. In a nutshell, even a small family need people from every age, to reside perfectly and happily with the changes in time and world. Then, country is the larger version of family itself. So, country need every kind of minds it has, to survive and sustain, to answer the questions like, what exactly do we need as a country?
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youth
, youngsters has
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started
to playing vital roles in politics
as well
. To this upward trend in youngsters, of getting a higher position in
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government
, there's hidden
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good
times for
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some
citizens.
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, there are a number of
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people
who does not believe in this. In this essay, I will discuss both the views and sum up with why youngsters should be
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given
a chance.

Firstly
, with the increasing sense of judiciary and politics,
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youth
has understood the
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need
of
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change
in system. Due to this, there are quite a
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lot
young
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people
who
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wants
to apply
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some
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new
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idea
towards the
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government
systems.
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Today
, the quality of education has increased
significantly
.
Thus
, the
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youth
of
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today
is
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well educated
and
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well informed
about the
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government
's policies and programs. It
is said
that, a
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countries
future lies in the hand of
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youth
of that
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country
. Although, it is not
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because
they are governing the
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country
.
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But
, to suggest that they will
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have to
govern over it
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in future
. By giving
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youth
a chance, they can implement
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new
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ideas
and
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new
ways of controlling the
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country
.
Yet
, without any experience it might
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get
pretty troublesome.

On the contrary
, the
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people
already governing the
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country
has experience and understanding of inner work flow of
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country
. Unlike
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new
schoolers, they have an upper hand over maintaining the perfect harmony with all the aspects of
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country
. Experienced personal is not likely to do anything
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new
which in terms is risky.
However
, by using their vast knowledge of the field they wouldn't find any
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need
of implying
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new
strategies. They will
easily
control any troublesome problem
merely
with their knowledge. Having said that, it is not as if there won't be any
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need
of
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new
plans,
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because
as we know
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government
always tries to apply
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new
applications and
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rules
to attain more profit and safety of
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country
. Although, they might lack the creativity or idealistic mindset to
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start
with. Due to their reliance on their prior knowledge.

In a nutshell, even a
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small
family
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need
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people
from every age, to reside
perfectly
and
happily
with the
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changes
in time and world. Then,
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country
is the larger version of family itself.
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So
,
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country
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need
every kind of minds it has, to survive and sustain, to answer the questions like, what exactly do we
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need
as a
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country
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IELTS essay Young people hold important position in government. Some say it is good, others say it is unsuitable.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
401 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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