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Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your own opinion? Give reasons and examples. v.1

Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your own opinion? Give reasons and examples. v. 1
It is said that the teenagers are paying more attention to those common problems happening in human's daily life. Personally, I find this appealing for some reasons as now will be discussed. On the one hand, nowadays young people are exposed to a vast amount information from sources such as the Internet, media or friends. Hence, their self- awareness of responsibilities toward these issues has seen much better. For example, the wide spread of news about social activities, projects or campaigns, strengthens more motivation and attracts teenagers, students. The power and development of technology also provide the youth with knowledge of events about the degradation of the environment as well as lack of welfare for animals. They can depend on those useful statements to avoid or seek for some measures. On the other hand, people come from antecedent generation have a tendency to put those practical solutions into actions daily. The adult has more experiences and extraordinary abilities to carry out the ideas. Take the activists as an example, they encourage, inspire the young people to take part in events and together solve the current issues. Different from the teenagers who would follow the instruction and the crowd, the older ones work as they want and volunteer. In conclusion, the young people's cognitive skills about those public concerns has considerably increased due to the opportunities as I have mentioned above. The aged citizens, however, have their own way to face up to the issues.
It
is said
that the
teenagers
are paying more attention to those common problems happening in human's daily life.
Personally
, I find this appealing for
some
reasons as
now
will
be discussed
.

On the one hand, nowadays young
people
are exposed
to a vast amount information from sources such as the Internet, media or friends.
Hence
, their self- awareness of responsibilities toward these issues has
seen
much better.
For example
, the wide spread of news about social activities, projects or campaigns, strengthens more motivation and attracts
teenagers
, students. The power and development of technology
also
provide the youth with knowledge of
events
about the degradation of the environment
as well
as lack of welfare for animals. They can depend on those useful statements to avoid or seek for
some
measures.

On the other hand
,
people
come
from antecedent generation have a tendency to put those practical solutions into actions daily. The adult has more experiences and extraordinary abilities to carry out the
ideas
. Take the activists as an example, they encourage, inspire the young
people
to
take part
in
events
and together solve the
current
issues.
Different
from the
teenagers
who would follow the instruction and the crowd, the older ones work as they want and volunteer.

In conclusion
, the young
people
's cognitive
skills
about those public concerns has
considerably
increased due to the opportunities as I have mentioned above. The aged citizens,
however
, have their
own
way to face up to the issues.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your own opinion? Give reasons and examples. v. 1

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