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young peole spend their time in shopping malls . this has negative effect on young people and society to what extent do you agree or disagree

young peole spend their time in shopping malls. this has negative effect on young people and society 2YJk
Teenagers likes to consume their time in shopping complex. It is believed that more interest in shopping malls put wrong impact on youngsters as well as communities I agree with this statement to extend how it affects. this essay will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, Teen-agers distract their vision from studies as well other activities in malls, they spends most of the time with friends in ideal gossips. Somehow they meet individuals that may be the reason from distraction their good habits. However, money also plays significant role in their these visit. For example, younger people are now days more interested in different attire with multiple tags of brands. which would be much expensive as comparatively their packet money. By which their expectations form their family is increase day by day. Moreover, several types of masses come to shopping malls in which children are also included. some money minded teenagers took wrong steps to exceed their wishes. By which many people from society suffer. Increase rate of crime is the part of their visit. Increase rate of crime is the part of their visit. In addition, younger avoid their studies, tuitions by which they get low grade in their examination. Parents who consume a major part of their wages in school fee survive with disappointments. To illustrate, Students who do not get better grade in their graduations could not appear in famous universities for their further studies. On the other hand, somehow spends time shopping malls can not much harmful for societies and young people. It would be assist them relaxation also experience to meet strangers. As well if they would not experienced good and worst now, then when will be the right time. They become much confident and know about the latest trend. To conclude, before my pen down i would lie to say that consumer their limited amount of time in shopping malls never hurt the societies and themselves it can enhance their confidence and compatibility to deal with people,
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Teenagers likes
to consume their
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time
in
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shopping
complex. It
is believed
that more interest in
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shopping
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malls
put
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wrong
impact on youngsters
as well
as communities I
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agree
with this statement to extend how it affects.
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this
essay will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
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Teen-agers
distract their vision from studies
as well
other activities in
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malls
, they
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spends
most of the
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time
with friends in ideal gossips. Somehow they
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meet
individuals that may be the reason from distraction their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
habits.
However
, money
also
plays significant role in their these visit.
For example
, younger
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people
are
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now
days more interested in
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different
attire with multiple tags of brands.
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which
would be much expensive as
comparatively
their packet money. By which their expectations form their family is increase day by day.
Moreover
, several types of masses
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to
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shopping
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malls
in which children are
also
included.
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some
money minded
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teenagers
took
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wrong
steps to exceed their wishes. By which
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many
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people
from society suffer. Increase rate of crime is the part of their visit. Increase rate of crime is the part of their visit.
In addition
, younger avoid their studies,
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tuitions
by which they
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get
low grade in their examination. Parents who consume a major part of their wages in school fee survive with disappointments. To illustrate, Students who do not
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get
better grade in their graduations could not appear in
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famous
universities for their
further
studies.
On the other hand
, somehow spends
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time
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shopping
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malls
can not much harmful for societies and young
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people
. It would be
Consider using a past participle here: "assisted".
assist
them relaxation
also
experience to
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meet
strangers.
As well
if they would not
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experienced
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good
and worst
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now
, then when will be the right
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time
. They become much confident and know about the latest trend.
To conclude
,
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before
my pen down
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i
would lie to say that consumer their limited amount of
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time
in
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shopping
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malls
never hurt the societies and themselves it can enhance their confidence and compatibility to deal with
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people
,
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IELTS essay young peole spend their time in shopping malls. this has negative effect on young people and society

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
334 words
5.5
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