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People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the most significant of these problems? How can these problems be tackled? v.5

People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the most significant of these problems? How can these problems be tackled? v. 5
In recent years, problems and emergencies are the central points in reports of media than the positive development. It is thought by some that this trend is harmful to individuals as well as society. In my opinion, more of these activities create fear in common peoples mind but it alerts everyone about the surroundings. Firstly, lot of problematic situations in the media reports generates a query in individuals. As a result of it people are looking for problematic news in newspaper or news channels to satisfy their hunger. Furthermore, It reflects in the general conversations in social gatherings which spreads the fire around. For example, people talk more about the robbery, murder, and violence as a conversation starter in parties and clubs than the general happy situations. Moreover, people feel insecure about the unseen scary society and trust of mankind and good deeds are reduced. Insecurity creates millions of bad thoughts in mind in a second. For example, parents in India teach their children not to go on lonely roads, that might not be dangerous because of fear obtain from repeated violent media reports. When People feel unsafe, unsecure every moment and that will lose the trust of other people, which has a bad impact on community to grow and prosper. On the other hand, the fact of real bad situations aware people to protect them from it. This is beneficial for everyone. To exemplify, a hurricane warning spreads all over the country to save peoples lives and to prepare the situations before ahead. Possible unseen danger can be avoided due to this. News reports are boon for someone concern about security and safety during National emergencies like a war and calamities. To summarize, emergencies and problems reported by the media have more bad influence in society than constructive impact. But, this trend aware people to be conscious about surroundings and situations.
In recent years, problems and emergencies are the central points in
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reports
of
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media
than the
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positive
development. It is
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thought
by
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some
that this trend is harmful to individuals
as well
as society. In my opinion, more of these activities create fear in common
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peoples
mind
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but
it alerts everyone about the surroundings.

Firstly
,
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lot of
problematic
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situations
in the
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media
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reports
generates a query in individuals.
As a result
of it
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people
are looking for problematic news in newspaper or news channels to satisfy their hunger.
Furthermore
, It reflects in the general conversations in social gatherings which spreads the fire around.
For example
,
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people
talk more about the robbery, murder, and violence as a conversation starter in parties and clubs than the general happy situations.

Moreover
,
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people
feel insecure about the unseen scary society and trust of mankind and
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good
deeds are
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reduced
. Insecurity creates millions of
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bad
thoughts in mind in a second.
For example
, parents in India teach their children not to go on lonely roads, that might not be
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dangerous
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because
of fear obtain from repeated violent
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media
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reports
. When
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People
feel unsafe, unsecure every moment and that will lose the trust of other
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people
, which has a
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bad
impact on community to grow and prosper.

On the other hand
, the fact of real
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bad
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situations
aware
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people
to protect them from it. This is beneficial for everyone. To exemplify, a hurricane warning spreads all over the country to save
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peoples
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lives
and to prepare the
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situations
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before
ahead. Possible unseen
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danger
can
be avoided
due to this. News
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reports
are boon for someone
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concern
about security and safety during National emergencies like a war and calamities.

To summarize
, emergencies and problems reported by the
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media
have more
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bad
influence in society than constructive impact.
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But
, this trend aware
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people
to be conscious about surroundings and
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situations
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the most significant of these problems? How can these problems be tackled? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
312 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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