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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, it's often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there sho v.81

The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, it's often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there sho v. 81
Internet has brought the world of knowledge at the tip of our hands. Not only it is the source of information, but also provides us with great means of communication. Some people believes that it can have negative outcomes and anything shared on internet should be monitored; while on the other hand, some are proponent of the view that there should not be any restrictions on its use. This article will discuss these two point of view. On the brighter side, internet has made possible for us to achieve things that were once beyond our imaginations. For example, we can now talk to our loved ones in real time that lives at other end of earth. In addition, it has also increases our chances to acquire knowledge; student can now take classes offered by a foreign university in their home country. Looking at such advantages one cannot deny the fact that internet is a great tool of 21st century. However, despite having such great advantages internet also has some disadvantages. First, Information on the internet is not totally reliable since anyone can access it; further, it can be used to spread negative information such as false rumors that can be hurt someone’s reputations. Secondly, it also serves as a platform for many illegal activities; for example, someone can steal our credit card Information online and easily deprive us of our hard earned money. I believe that we should not confine the use of internet as that can thwart its positive influences as well, but we must be vigilant enough to monitor any unlawful activities on internet and should always verify the authenticity of the source of information we find on internet before accepting it.
Internet has brought the world of knowledge at the tip of our hands. Not
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only
it is the source of
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information
,
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but
also
provides us with great means of communication.
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Some
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
believes
that it can have
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negative
outcomes and anything shared on internet should
be monitored
; while
on the other hand
,
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some
are proponent of the view that there should not be any restrictions on its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
. This article will discuss these two point of view.

On the brighter side, internet has made possible for us to achieve things that were once beyond our imaginations.
For example
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
talk to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
ones in real time that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
at other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of earth.
In addition
, it has
also
increases our chances to acquire knowledge; student can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
take classes offered by a foreign university in their home country. Looking at such advantages one cannot deny the fact that internet is a great tool of 21st century.

However
, despite having such great advantages internet
also
has
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some
disadvantages.
First
,
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Information
on the internet is not
totally
reliable since anyone can access it;
further
, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to spread
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negative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
such as false rumors that can
be hurt
someone’s reputations.
Secondly
, it
also
serves as a platform for
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many
illegal activities;
for example
, someone can steal our credit card
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Information
online and
easily
deprive us of our
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
hard earned
money.

I believe that we should not confine the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of internet as that can thwart its
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
influences
as well
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be vigilant
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to monitor any unlawful activities on internet and should always verify the authenticity of the source of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
we find on internet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
accepting it.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, it's often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there sho v. 81

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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