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Which way do you prefer to spend time: with a small number of close friends or with many friends? Compare these two views. v.2

Which way do you prefer to spend time: with a small number of close friends or with many friends? Compare these two views. v. 2
People with different behavioral traits have different preferences of the groups of friends they want to hang out with. This essay chalk out the difference between people who prefer to be with larger groups versus the ones who prefer smaller groups of friends. One of the many benefits of being with close friends is not only can you share your happiness with them but also your troubles and grief. They have been with you through your thick and thin and hence know how to handle you at the time of trouble. For instance, my brother, who is an Introvert by nature, would never prefer being with larger groups as he would not want to intrude into his privacy and would not be comfortable sharing his space with a lot of people. On one hand your close friends understand the ‘in and out’ of you, however, being with larger group of friends give you the benefit of doing a lot of group activities/parties that won’t be possible with fewer people. There would always be someone available for you when you need him or her. On the contrary to my brother’s preference, I, being an Extrovert, always choose to be with a lot of friends as it gives me the chance to connect with different people having different mindsets and perceptions. Although both the scenarios have their own advantages, it totally depends upon the person and his or her choice to hang out with friends. Rather than considering the number of friends you have, comfort of sharing your personal space and time should be considered as important.
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friends
they want to hang out with. This essay chalk out the difference between
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people
who prefer to be with larger
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groups
versus the ones who prefer smaller
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groups
of friends.

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benefits of being with close
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friends
is not
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can you share your happiness with them
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also
your troubles and grief. They have been with you through your thick and thin and
hence
know how to handle you at the time of trouble.
For instance
, my brother, who is an Introvert by nature, would never prefer being with larger
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groups
as he would not want to intrude into his privacy and would not be comfortable sharing his space with
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a lot of
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people
.

On one hand your close
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friends
understand the ‘in and out’ of you,
however
, being with larger
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group
of
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friends
give you the benefit of doing
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a lot of
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group
activities/parties that won’t be possible with fewer
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people
. There would always be someone available for you when you need him or her.
On the contrary
to my brother’s preference, I, being an Extrovert, always choose to be with
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a lot of
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friends
as it gives me the chance to connect with
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people
having
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different
mindsets and perceptions.

Although both the scenarios have their
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own
advantages, it
totally
depends upon the person and
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his or her
choice to hang out with
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friends
.
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than considering the number of
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friends
you have, comfort of sharing your personal space and time should
be considered
as
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important
.
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IELTS essay Which way do you prefer to spend time: with a small number of close friends or with many friends? Compare these two views. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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