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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words. v.78

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 78
Nowadays, in many areas exist gender quotes. This means, that in government, companies, schools or different institutions are minimum places or job positions for women. I agree with this idea because could result beneficial for the society and its development. Besides, in universities can have a positive impact in many carrers. Firstly, it is well known that exist “men’s careers” such as related to math, astronomy, engeneering, or hard work. Reserve quotes for females in this field could help to break gender stereotypes and demonstrate that women can do the same as men do. As a result, in these work’s fields will exits more women doing the same job and promoting the female power. Also, it will encourage the new girls generations to follow their abilities and future plans. A second argument is that an equitative classroom have many benefits for the students development. An equal environment help men and women respect about the other, understand differences in the way of act or thinking, and also, put both gender in the same intellectual level. This increment the respect of men about women abilities. For example, Lastarria Institute, an historical only boys school, transformed into a both sex school last year. The results have been amazing for the whole group. In one hand, the boys said that with this experience they discover that women have the same intelligent as them and can do the same things. On the other hand, teachers said that their students are more quiet and concentrated than before the girls entry. To conclude, gender quotes is beneficial in many ways. It help to cut gender disqualifications because men would have the opportunity to check that women have the same intelligence and qualities to do anything. While, and equal treatment show to the society that are not differences, promoting in the new generations the no gender discrimination and encouraging girls to follow their dreams.
Nowadays, in
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many
areas exist gender quotes. This means, that in
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government
,
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companies
, schools or
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different
institutions are minimum places or job positions for
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women
. I
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agree
with this
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idea
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because
could result beneficial for the society and its development.
Besides
, in universities can have a
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positive
impact in
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many
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carrers
.

Firstly
, it is well known that exist “
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men
’s careers” such as related to math, astronomy,
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engeneering
, or
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hard
work. Reserve quotes for females in this field could
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help
to break gender stereotypes and demonstrate that
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women
can do the same as
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men
do.
As a result
, in these work’s fields will exits more
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women
doing the same job and promoting the female power.
Also
, it will encourage the new girls generations to follow their abilities and future plans.

A second argument is that an
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equitative
classroom have
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many
benefits for the
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students
development. An equal environment
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help
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men
and
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women
respect about the other, understand differences in the way of act or thinking, and
also
, put both gender in the same intellectual level. This increment the respect of
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men
about
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women
abilities.
For example
,
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Lastarria
Institute, an historical
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only
boys school, transformed into a both sex school last year. The results have been amazing for the whole group. In one hand, the boys said that with this experience they discover that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
have the same intelligent as them and can do the same things.
On the other hand
, teachers said that their students are more quiet and concentrated than
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before
the
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girls
entry.

To conclude
, gender quotes is beneficial in
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many
ways. It
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help
to
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cut
gender disqualifications
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because
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men
would have the opportunity to
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check
that
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women
have the same intelligence and qualities to do anything. While, and equal treatment
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show
to the society that are not differences, promoting in the new generations the no gender discrimination and encouraging girls to follow their dreams.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 78

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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