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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words. v.44

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 44
Some individuals think that exchanging data related to research in science field, business and educational world is good, while others say that certain information is significant that sharing it without care may become dangerous. This essay will argue that although sharing information will help in learning different things in fields such as science and many others, passing data without care might be not reasonable because they need years of hard work to create. On the one side, data exchange will help each others to learn the new things. This is to say that in today's technological era, by using the internet, people will easily access research findings which help them to continue further research. In addition, students can learn about different subjects in advance with the use of the web. A good reference for this is that, 75% of the people learn new things from the sites, which gives free access, to use data on the internet reported in a survey in 2017. In my point of view, these will make people less aware and lazy about the things which are very important. On the other side, there are requirement of years of hard work to make some important data. This is to say that online courses which take loads of hard work and time to produce by the owner and if those data will share without taking care, then the producers would get big amount of loss which leads them down in their career, For example, according to a research organized by MTIN university, India, 45% of the people use pirated softwares in their computers. In contrast, I believe that these types of data would be fruitful to make people aware and cautious if share them with charges. In conclusion, although exchanging the information may give us lots of chances to learn, I think that it makes people less aware and lazy because of easy access and sometimes, there might be a huge loss.
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Some
individuals
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think
that exchanging
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data
related to
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research
in science field, business and educational world is
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good
, while others say that certain information is significant that sharing it without care may become
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dangerous
. This essay will argue that although sharing information will
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help
in learning
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different
things in fields such as science and
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many
others, passing
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data
without care might be not reasonable
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because
they need years of
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hard
work to create.

On the one side,
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data
exchange will
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help
each
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others
to
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learn
the new things. This is to say that in
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today
's technological era, by using the internet,
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people
will
easily
access
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research
findings which
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help
them to continue
further
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research
.
In addition
, students can
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learn
about
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different
subjects in advance with the
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use
of the web. A
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good
reference for this is that, 75% of the
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people
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learn
new things from the sites, which gives free access, to
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use
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data
on the internet reported in a survey in 2017. In my point of view, these will
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make
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people
less aware and lazy about the things which are
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very
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important
.

On the
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other
side, there are
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requirement
of years of
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hard
work to
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make
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some
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important
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data
. This is to say that online courses which take loads of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work and time to produce by the owner and if those
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data
will share without taking care, then the producers would
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get
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big
amount of loss which leads them down in their career,
For example
, according to a
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research
organized by
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MTIN
university, India, 45% of the
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people
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use
pirated
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softwares
in their computers.
In contrast
, I believe that these types of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
would be fruitful to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
aware and cautious if share them with charges.

In conclusion
, although exchanging the information may give us lots of chances to
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learn
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that it
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makes
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people
less aware and lazy
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because
of easy access and
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sometimes
, there might be a huge loss.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is not a genetic gift, it is a social gift. Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 44

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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