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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can t v.39

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can t v. 39
So, according to few people children's playing activities have to be informed like which can help them in their academic otherwise there is no use of it. So here I am talking about educational activities, like it can be pretty useful. Because it has two advantages like children, are enjoying as well as getting some information. In this way they don't have to be forced to learn because this form of education is coming from play time. For example, playing "Sudoku", although it's a game, but it provides lots of information and children can definitely learn lot's of techniques which can certainly enhance their thinking abilities. In this para I will be talking about why other activities are not waste. Like let's take an example of some leisure activity like playing outside lets say "Hide and Seek", certainly it can't be considered as educational. So my one point is it helps children balance out their overall life, like it helps to ease out the pressure that they might be feeling from their studies. It can be considered as a break from the stressful activities, because as a child sometimes study could be very overwhelming. And also now there have been scientifically proven studies, which shows breaks or such leisure activities can boost children or any other person's performances. So to conclude, I must say that I disagree with the above statement like we cannot discard children's leisure activities just because it's not educational, because every activity has its own benefits. However, I do feel that there has to be a balance, because educational leisure activities can also help children as much as non-educational. However, excess of both can be bad.
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study could be
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IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can t v. 39

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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