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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter•describe the problems•explain how they are affecting peop v.28

People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter•describe the problems•explain how they are affecting peop v. 28
It is believed by some people that the safety of new products can only be ensured after they are tried on animals. I disagree with this notion as the animals are also creatures and we cannot harm them with any products of unknown constitution. Some people argue and I agree that experimenting on animals for the sake of protection of human beings has been a selfish attitude which human beings have adopted since long. For the sake of our own safety and protection, we humans, have murdered millions of animals for experimentation. For instance, man consider themselves the most superior creature and the whole universe was meant to serve the human beings. Hence, for their own survival, they can literally perish the entire universe. Moreover, this would not stop here as the rich scientists are now paying poorer countries for poor people so that they could experiment with them as well. So, the selfish nature of human beings has no boundaries. Another issue to consider while experimenting on animals is that they also have the feeling of pain. This has been proven by the scientists that when animals are subjected to various tests, they also feel pain and agony. So just for the purpose of experiments, it is unwise to put them in painful situations. For instance, the animal rights protection societies have established by few kind people to stop human beings from experimenting on animals who cannot express their pain. It is extremely difficult to see the animals suffer from cancer on which teratogenic products have been tried. In conclusion, humans should stop experimenting on animals for the safety of products as there are several other ways like knowing the chemical composition and avoiding the products which have potential harmful effects.
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is believed
by
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some
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people
that the safety of new
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products
can
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only
be ensured
after they
are tried
on
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animals
. I disagree with this notion as the
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animals
are
also
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creatures and
we cannot harm them with any
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products
of unknown constitution.

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Some
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people
argue and I
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agree
that
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experimenting
on
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animals
for the sake of protection of
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human
beings has been a selfish attitude which
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human
beings have adopted since long. For the sake of our
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own
safety and protection, we
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humans
, have murdered millions of
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animals
for experimentation.
For instance
,
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man
consider themselves the most superior creature and the whole universe
was meant
to serve the
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human
beings.
Hence
, for their
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own
survival, they can
literally
perish the entire universe.
Moreover
, this would not
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stop
here as the rich scientists are
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now
paying poorer countries for poor
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people
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so
that they could experiment with them
as well
.
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So
, the selfish nature of
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human
beings has no boundaries.

Another issue to consider while
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experimenting
on
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animals
is that they
also
have the feeling of pain. This has
been proven
by the scientists that when
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animals
are subjected
to various
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tests
, they
also
feel pain and agony.
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So
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just
for the purpose of experiments, it is unwise to put them in painful situations.
For instance
, the
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animal
rights protection societies have established by few kind
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people
to
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stop
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human
beings from
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experimenting
on
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animals
who cannot express their pain. It is
extremely
difficult to
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see
the
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animals
suffer from cancer on which
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teratogenic
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products
have
been tried
.

In conclusion
,
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humans
should
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stop
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experimenting
on
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animals
for the safety of
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products
as there are several other ways like knowing the chemical composition and avoiding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
which have potential harmful effects.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter•describe the problems•explain how they are affecting peop v. 28

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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