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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words. You are visiting your close friend’s city next week. Write a letter asking your friend to be at the airport to receive you. Express your desire to see the famous historica v.25

You are visiting your close friend’s city next week. Write a letter asking your friend to be at the airport to receive you. Express your desire to see the famous historica v. 25
In this era, the internet is a prominent example of the developing technology. It is argued that if everybody in this world has easy reach of the data available on the cyberspace, then it can transform our world positively in upcoming time. This essay completely disagrees with the given statement due to the misuse of the available information and it will unveil personal data which will be discussed in further paragraphs. Our world is full of diverse personalities which include terrorists. Terrorist can steal information which are on the internet and they may use it for some terror activities. There are numerous types of details are available on the web which are not supposed to share any one for the safety of citizens of the country. For examples, Terrorist can get access to the map of any building and then they may plant bombs at the specific place by analysing the map. As a result of this we may lose so many citizens or some politicians as well. Another reason for my position is that the personal information like photos, videos and live location may put a person in peril. There are some private contents of our phone which nobody would like to share, but because of the internet these will be exposed to the public. For example, in India, in year 2002, a criminal made fake passport just by getting access to the victim`s Facebook photos. The confidential details are at a risk of being public. In conclusion, this essay has shown disagreement with the aforementioned statement because of theft of personal contents and misuse of any data.
In this era, the internet is a prominent example of the developing technology. It
is argued
that if everybody in this world has easy reach of the data available on the cyberspace, then it can transform our world
positively
in upcoming time. This essay completely disagrees with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
statement due to the misuse of the available information and it will unveil personal data which will
be discussed
in
further
paragraphs.

Our world is full of diverse personalities which include terrorists. Terrorist can steal information which are on the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
internet and
they may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
terror activities. There are numerous types of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
are available on the web which are not supposed to share
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
for the safety of citizens of the country. For examples, Terrorist can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
access to the map of any
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
building and
then they may plant bombs at the specific place by
Possible spelling mistake. 'analysing' is British English.
analysing
the map.
As a result
of this we may lose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
citizens or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
politicians
as well
.

Another reason for my position is that the personal information like photos, videos and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
location may put a person in peril. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
private contents of our phone which nobody would like to share,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the internet these will
be exposed
to the public.
For example
, in India, in year 2002, a criminal made fake passport
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
by getting access to the
The character between 'victim' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "victim’s" (curly apostrophe) or "victim's" (straight apostrophe).
victim`s
Facebook photos. The confidential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
are at a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of being public.

In conclusion
, this essay has shown disagreement with the aforementioned statement
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of theft of personal contents and misuse of any data.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are visiting your close friend’s city next week. Write a letter asking your friend to be at the airport to receive you. Express your desire to see the famous historica v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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