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Although you have more interest in computers you are not able to get enrolled in a computing and statistics course as an elementary course is mandatory for enrollment Write a letter to the enrollment officer describe why you are writing explain your circu v.1

Although you have more interest in computers you are not able to get enrolled in a computing and statistics course as an elementary course is mandatory for enrollment Write a letter to the enrollment officer describe why you are writing explain your circu v. 1
At present, environmental problems have become a serious issue in all over the world. There are many circumstances which lead to pollute the environment. Such as pollution as well as climate alternations are rising nowadays. The trend of environmental has become an alarming issue of all the nations. Authorities have taken many methods at the global levels yet they got just few solutions. The upcoming paragraphs will not only describe the problems of the environment, but also certain solutions, which can be solved the threads as soon as possible. To embark with, there are many problems of environment. Like pollution and climate changing. Since technology has made many vehicles for the people of life better, they use vehicles more and more. It is often seen that the number of transportation on a road has increased rather than in the past by the people. These vehicles use more fuels and spread the fossil fuels which are evil for the environment. Another problem is that increase industries on the global levels. To illustrate, many countries are building industries for the development. Industries not only spread the harm air, but also waste lots of water throughout the trash. Thirdly, more and more people are cutting the trees for fulfilling their needs. The number of trees on the global level has decreased which effects environment. Due to the phenomenon, climate is changing day by day. Like, melting an ice as well as winters are getting colder and summers are getting hotter. However, authorities have taken many solutions, but they failed to deter the environment problems. Government should take some possible solutions, which should be very strong. Firstly, the government should arrest those people who kill the animals and cut the trees, because animals are part of the nature. When all the species of animal disappear from the earth, its effect the ecological chain as well as lost the diversity of nature. Government should grow more and more plants at the global level. It is not only the responsibility of the government, but also individuals. Government should motivate to the people for growing the trees. Instead of the trees, as it is not possible to live on the earth. So these are two solutions which they can taken the problems. To conclude, although government provides many provisions to the people, yet it is very important to protect the surroundings. Changing of climate should be taken by the government all of the nations.
At present, environmental
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problems
have become a serious issue in all over the world. There are
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many
circumstances which lead to pollute the
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environment
. Such as pollution
as well
as
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climate
alternations are rising nowadays. The trend of environmental has become an alarming issue of all the nations. Authorities have taken
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many
methods at the
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global
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levels
yet
they
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got
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just
few
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solutions
. The upcoming paragraphs will not
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describe
the
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problems
of the
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environment
,
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but
also
certain
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solutions
, which can
be solved
the threads as
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soon
as possible.

To embark with, there are
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many
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problems
of
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environment
. Like pollution and
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climate
changing. Since technology has made
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many
vehicles for the
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people
of life better, they
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use
vehicles more and more. It is
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often
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seen
that the number of transportation on a road has increased
rather
than in the past by the
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people
. These vehicles
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use
more fuels and spread the fossil fuels which are evil for the
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environment
. Another
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problem
is that increase industries on the
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global
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levels
. To illustrate,
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many
countries are building industries for the development. Industries not
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only
spread the harm air,
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but
also
waste lots of water throughout the trash.
Thirdly
, more and more
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people
are cutting the
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trees
for fulfilling their needs. The number of
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trees
on the
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global
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level
has decreased which effects
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environment
. Due to the phenomenon,
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climate
is changing day by day. Like, melting an ice
as well
as winters are getting colder and summers are getting hotter.

However
, authorities have taken
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many
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solutions
,
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but
they failed to deter the
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environment
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problems
.
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Government
should take
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some
possible
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solutions
, which should be
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very
strong.
Firstly
, the
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government
should arrest those
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people
who kill the animals and
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cut
the
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trees
,
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because
animals are part of the nature. When all the species of animal disappear from the earth, its effect the ecological chain
as well
as lost the diversity of nature.
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Government
should grow more and more plants at the
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global
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level
. It is not
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only
the responsibility of the
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government
,
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but
also
individuals.
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should motivate to the
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people
for growing the
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trees
.
Instead
of the
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trees
, as it is not possible to
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live
on the earth.
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So
these are two
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solutions
which they can
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taken
the problems.

To conclude
, although
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government
provides
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many
provisions to the
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people
,
yet
it is
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very
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important
to protect the surroundings. Changing of
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climate
should
be taken
by the
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government
Consider using "all the".
all of the
nations.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Although you have more interest in computers you are not able to get enrolled in a computing and statistics course as an elementary course is mandatory for enrollment Write a letter to the enrollment officer describe why you are writing explain your circu v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
407 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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