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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. 1. Say why he would not enjoy going to college2. Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her3. Su v.3

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. 1. Say why he would not enjoy going to college2. Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her3. Su v. 3
Some hobbies are relatively easy, while others present I believe that both types of hobby can be fun, and I therefore disagree with the statement that hobbies need to be difficult in order to be enjoyable. On the one hand, many people enjoy easy hobbies. One example of an activity easy for most people is swimming. This hobby requires very little equipment, it is simple to learn, and it is inexpensive. I remember learning to swim at my local swimming pool when I was a child, and it never felt like a demanding or challenging experience. Another hobby that I find easy and fun is photography. In my opinion, anyone can take interesting pictures without knowing too much about the technicalities of operating a camera. Despite being straightforward, taking photos is a satidfying activity On the other hand, difficult hobbies can sometimes be more exciting. If an activity is more challenging, we might feel a greater sense of satisfaction when we manage to do it successfully. For example, film editing is a hobby that requires a high knowledge and expertise. In my case, it took me around two years before I became competent in this activity, but now I enjoy it much more than I did when I started. I believe that many hobbies give us more pleasure when we reach a higher level of performance because the results are better and the feeling of achievement is greater. In conclusion, simple hobbies can be fun and relaxing, but difficult hobbies can be equally pleasurable for different reasons.
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, while others present I believe that both types of
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can be fun, and I
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hobbies
need to be difficult in order to be enjoyable.

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. One example of an activity
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for most
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equipment, it is simple to learn, and it is inexpensive. I remember learning to swim at my local swimming pool when I was a child, and it never felt like a demanding or challenging experience. Another
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that I find
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and fun is photography. In my opinion, anyone can take interesting pictures without knowing too much about the technicalities of operating a camera. Despite being straightforward, taking photos is a
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activity


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can
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be more exciting. If an activity is more challenging, we might feel a greater sense of satisfaction when we manage to do it
successfully
.
For example
, film editing is a
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hobby
that requires a high knowledge and expertise. In my case, it took me around two years
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I became competent in this activity,
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. I believe that
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many
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give us more pleasure when we reach a higher level of performance
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because
the results are better and the feeling of achievement is greater.

In conclusion
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can be fun and relaxing,
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but
difficult
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can be
equally
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IELTS essay You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. 1. Say why he would not enjoy going to college2. Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her3. Su v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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