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ou recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTell the manag v.1

ou recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTell the manag v. 1
Working for a multinational is thought by many to be the most effective way to learn about different cultures. Thesis Statement: Although Working for such a company provides the opportunity to mix with people from a variety of cultural backgrounds, I would argue that this is not necessarily the best way to learn about other cultures. There is no doubt that for some people, working for a multinational organisation will enhance their understanding of other cultures. The first reason is that in a multinational organisation one can learn about the customs and traditions of other countries, though mixing with people from different backgrounds who work in the company or liaising with colleagues abroad. Showing to other languages is also likely, something that gives a much greater depth of understanding of a culture. There may also be the chance to relocate to work in another country, which would mean complete immersion in that culture. However, there are a number of reasons that it is not necessarily the best way. Firstly, there is no guarantee that you will be a person who gets such exposure to other cultures since it depends on your position within the company. Not all employees have roles where they regularly mix with other cultures. Also, there are also other excellent ways to achieve such a goal. For example, many people these days travel the world, and this is an opportunity to meet and spend time with people from other countries. It is possible to do voluntary work with organisations and charities that work in other countries, something that would mean you meet a mix of people rather than just those works in companies. In conclusion, despite the potential way in which working for a multinational company can result in contact with people from other cultures, i believe that it cannot be assumed it is the best way as there are other options to do this.
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people
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the best way to learn about
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other
cultures.

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will enhance their understanding of
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other
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cultures
. The
first
reason is that in a
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multinational
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organisation
one can learn about the customs and traditions of
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other
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countries
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people
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culture
. There may
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country
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necessarily
the best way.
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cultures
since it depends on your position within the
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company
. Not all employees have roles where they
regularly
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other
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cultures
.
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these days travel the world, and this is an opportunity to
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organisations
and charities that
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companies
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,
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believe that it cannot
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The limits of my language mean the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay ou recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Say where you think you left the papers. Explain why they are so importantTell the manag v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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