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You are planning to go abroad for study. You wish to do a part time job. Ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to him and in your letter: . Give some details of your study plans. explain why you need a part time job. suggest how your f v.1

You are planning to go abroad for study. You wish to do a part time job. Ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to him and in your letter: . Give some details of your study plans. explain why you need a part time job. suggest how your f v. 1
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buy
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children
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positive
point, while another group of thinkers
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are
against this direction. This essay will highlight both opinions and
also
elaborated that art
certainly
requires mastery over the fundamental of it and
thus
will lead to a logical conclusion.

To
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start
with, there are myriad of reasons which will
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elaborate this argument,
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but
the most preponderant on stems from the fact that having the premium salary to
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children
is the best legacy for themselves.
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many
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children
are hobby to save the payment and after
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children
utilize for
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good
purposes like as,
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some
juniors
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buy
books
as well
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their choices and
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some
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wage
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when they stuck in any problem.
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children
and kids save
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check
after receiving legacy
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check
.
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depend on parents and if, there are
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this there burden are
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on families. Needless to say, all these merits stand in a
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good
stead.

However
, the latter view suggests that there are
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some
pitfalls that negate these arguments and which can
certainly
overwhelm the potential influence of this
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but
one of the most alarming ones is that gave a legacy property is a
totally
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negative
point on
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children
. This is to express,
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some
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descendents
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donation salary for
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bad
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purposes and
they
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buy
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bad
things and learn
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bad
habits.
Hence
, it is apparent why
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many
are against this tendency.

In the nutshell,
nevertheless
, weighing the both the options, I believe that there is no single conclusion
still
, I take this ground the effective clap require
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use
of both hands.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are planning to go abroad for study. You wish to do a part time job. Ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to him and in your letter: . Give some details of your study plans. explain why you need a part time job. suggest how your f v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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